Teen Poetry #5 |
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a little bit of truth. |
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chas Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 101Lynn, ma |
i don't know much anymore, it's all gone, what i thought i had control of, turns out to be wrong, for how long, i don't know, but to many people, told me" I told you so," funny, all their laughs and mockery, it's really helping me, yea, you know it, they know it, if not, then why won't they stop? they come in flock, like sheeps, baa baa baa, what the BLEEP, i wonder what they are thinking, do they think they're helping me, sure, yes indeed, it's not their fault i can't succeed, a little help is all i need, one hand at a time PLEASE, but why oh why, why should i try, what'll end up happening, everyone will soon realize, that when dealing with me, failure likes to keep me company. |
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JBaker515![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
chas.. this was really cool i liked it a lot!!! great job kid |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
so much bitterness...the poem was quite powerful with strong emotions...i liked how youw rote this one...enjoyed ![]() im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Chas! I'm really impressed. Such a GREAT ending. I LOVED that last line. Wonderful write! ![]() |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great job here. I really liked how you wrote this one. I loved the ending. VEry good job. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WHy do you think that way. Try looking in the brighter side of things And don't even mind what other people say Thanks for sharing my friend hope things get better hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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DarkenedShadow Member
since 2001-07-23
Posts 114Kansas |
One of the many pains I know all too well, this write spells you and thats important and excellent. It does seem to be trouble some in words though as in the pain of lacking self respect or for a lack of a better word, beleif in yourself. I bonded to this one thanks.... /Nick/ |
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