Teen Poetry #5 |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
now you see me, now you don't in my life there are times when i feel like maybe tomorrow you won't. hiding from love yet embracing pain same endless cycle just a different day. a dangerous storm of emotions rampaging through my soul these are the only signs of my visibility that i can't control. -bergundy- maybe i'll catch fire, something nice to warm me. something pure to burn away the darkness, that hides inside my mind. -alkaline trio- |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
Wow... very raw emotion. You put it into words well. lol... I like your critique message... Anyway, awesome poem. Thank you. Never argue with a fool. He may be doing the same thing. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
"a dangerous storm of emotions rampaging through my soul" that hit me hard....i liked this poem so much...thanks for sharing bergandy! ![]() My england is goodly- are you strudable? |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
fearing-laughter- You've done a great job of expressing this storm of emotions. Very well done! ![]() Hugs, ~Vicky |
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since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Awesome!! Absolutely awesome!! This one really hit home. Short and sweet and had such an impact on me. Thanks for sharing this!! iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf.. |
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