Teen Poetry #5 |
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Empty Shadows... |
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Alyssa![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
OK, ive had writers stump lately guys and this was the first piece to saw down the stump..hope its ok... tell me how u like it... The Dawn broke red upon the sky the very air afire The demon sent unto myself would thirst should i retire i fought the dark throughout the night but only those within my sight now only i shall stand alive if nothing had the chance to live if no one else could thrive i looked upon the havoc done with the taste of bile when the very sight of lovers clasped give birth a saddened smile and with this view i foresaw my fate for my rude awakening had come to late now death was coming unto pass to slay my very grasp.... did it suck? "Like, yeah."-the famous cheerleaders |
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branden726![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Niccccccccccce ive now added you to my library its very nice i liked it you did great. All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare! |
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Alyssa![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
thanks branden boy! "Like, yeah."-the famous cheerleaders |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
much emotional expression...you did quite well...and of course it didnt suck!...this was very nice ![]() im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done here. No, it didn't suck. I thought you did well. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Alyssa![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
thanks guyz! *hugz* "Like, yeah."-the famous cheerleaders |
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Alexia![]()
since 2001-06-07
Posts 164Sweet And Sassy |
Good poem Chic! I know your a good writter cuz i've read like all your poems *lol* Keep it up! ![]() If I tell you I love you, Can I keep you? |
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Alyssa![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
thanks megan i gotta borrow ur willa cd! "I wanna be bad"-willa ford |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Alyssa Alyssa Alyssa I neve thought you had it in you This is really excellent love to see more in the future keep it up hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
hehe gotta put it in my library [This message has been edited by AngelPoet87 (edited 07-25-2001).] |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
Excellent flow, great poem in all. Liefhe alle ten spijte van duivel. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
give birth a saddened smile and with this view i foresaw my fate no it didnt suck in the slightest..dont be so har don yourself..it was quite deep..i thought.. ![]() ![]() ![]() "Killer in me is a killer in you, my love |
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