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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Candlelight paints orange shadows across your face, and they dance excitedly I can feel the thickness of desire and passion surrounding us here in this room Black lace and a little perfume, I brought myself here for you to own me in your hands Maybe you can see it in my eyes - the building need For you watch so closely And taste my existence slowly, as if you would drink every last drop 3.18.02 "The most beautiful makeup for a woman is passion, but cosmetics are easier to buy." - Yves Saint Laurent |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
"And taste my existence slowly, as if you would drink every last drop" Nicely said...I like the way you express yourself, dark yet lovely...ya know? "Dont piss me off, Im runing out of places to hide the bodies." |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
"I can feel the thickness of desire and passion surrounding us here in this room" The imagery here.... I can see, I can taste, I can touch the thickness of desire. Spendid imegery. "Black lace and a little perfume, I brought myself here for you to own me in your hands" The sensuality here.... and perhaps the innocence... no, tremblind yearning for love, for being desired, to be longed for... is very obvious. You give yourself to him... wilingly. With no regrets. "For you watch so closely And taste my existence slowly, as if you would drink every last drop" Damn powerful words here, My Memina.  Damn. I can see myself in them... I can see the picture painted in my mind's eye. So very clear.Bloody spendid.  ~ Titus My motto... always changing, always improving, living life in veiw of eternity. |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
rhythm where there's none. enjoying the way you turned the tide, made adultery and abuse sound so seductive. [from the eyes of a 'blind' victim]. i'm way off base [i know it], but that's my interpretation. i love it. /gwen/ so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3 [This message has been edited by quietlydying (03-19-2002 08:05 PM).] |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Not entirely off base... maybe you'd be surprised. (Not so sure that's a good thing or a bad thing.) Besides, it's always nice to see "different" perspectives. "The most beautiful makeup for a woman is passion, but cosmetics are easier to buy." - Yves Saint Laurent |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
well usually i am kind of a negative person, but i can't really find anything negative with this piece. i really enjoyed reading it,and it brought a wistful smile to my face. you described the scene so well. thank you for sharing this. -bergundy- maybe i'll catch fire, something nice to warm me. something pure to burn away the darkness, that hides inside my mind. -alkaline trio- |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
"Black lace and a little perfume, I brought myself here for you to own me in your hands" very sensual....*spine tingles* i like this VERY much thanks jaime...into the library it goes!  My england is goodly- are you strudable? |
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