Teen Poetry #5 |
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hold me |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA ![]() |
Stop this room from spinning Open up my eyes My mind is reeling Into blissful oblivion Hold me Comfort me As I would do onto you My sweet child Pay no mind To my endless tangents Of passion and pain And raging fires Echoing out your name Hold me Be with me Please don't let go of my hand I need you I love you As any other dear friend Would bestow upon your gentle brow Warm my cold Tired heart Keep me from falling from this chair Come over here Please, whisper softly to me That we will Always be the bestest of Friends Never letting go Holding on tight And not once Allowing each other To sucumb to the shadows That prey upon innocence In the darkest,lonely hours of the night... |
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punkrockerrobin![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
good poem i liked it a lot i am me don't tell me different!! |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
This was beautiful Kris (and I wasnt 1st to respond!) I think we all want someone to hold us, to comfort us. And I pray that one day we are lucky enough to find that. Great Write Lisa [This message has been edited by LCBS (03-17-2002 05:50 PM).] |
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ShortSexyAngelOnEarth Junior Member
since 2001-12-24
Posts 36im a louisiana cajun princess! lol |
hey, that was pretty! i liked it! good job! ![]() |
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PoetryIsLife![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
"To sucumb to the shadows That prey upon innocence In the darkest,lonely hours of the night..." By far some of your best lines. I may have a thing for your work, but this one reaches me deeper. You know why, my friend. The longing, the passion, your raw emotions, I can comphrehend them.... which shows a well done poem. Splendid my friend. Splendid. ![]() ~ Titus My motto... always changing, always improving, living life in veiw of eternity. [This message has been edited by PoetryIsLife (03-17-2002 09:24 PM).] |
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