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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
*I found this poem when I was going through some old papers, this is a really old one by me.* Her Smile My heart is captured captured by pure beauty from the one I love Her smile warms my heart my heart warms my soul and from that warmth it makes me whole "Right now I'm having amnesia and deja vu at the same time. I think I've forgotten this before." |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
This was a wondeful poem, even if it was old. I noticed in the last stanza how the flow was a bit off, but it was not bad. *Amanda* |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
I think ole stuff can often be the best stuff you know what I mean anyways I liked the poem it flowed well. we fall like the stars then rise like the sun..Repentence.Forgiveness.We are blame worthy hold us to our wrongs..but don't hold our wrongs against us |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Sweet poem here....oh and LowMan...I hate you for doing that trick on me haha. Once again, good poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
Lol, I can't stop laughing about it. Sorry if I really freaked you out. "Right now I'm having amnesia and deja vu at the same time. I think I've forgotten this before." |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i REALLY liked this poem LML...just beautiful...short but sweet...loved the read  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Good read. Short but really sweet. keep it up. hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Low Man's Lyric- Very sweet write...enjoyed.. *smiles*, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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DarkenedShadow Member
since 2001-07-23
Posts 114Kansas |
Sometimes the shortest words are the best one's to express on this subjct alone. GOOD JOB!!! /Nick/ |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
this is really really sweet!!!..i cant point out what i like most about it cuz i love all of it....just makes me go green again...short and sweet...im fast becoming a fan.. period pain is HELL! |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Very sweet write, Aaron! Aargh.. how did I miss this one? I enjoyed the poem. Very beautiful in it's simplicity. Nice work! --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
Hey this poem was really emotion packed and very sweet. I'm sure those lines mean a lot to some special girl of yours! ^*~Kicking Kim~*^  "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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