Teen Poetry #5 |
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Somewhere In Between |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA ![]() |
Sarcastic tone In my voice tonight Fake laughs Echoing on the other end Little does he know it That I'm somewhere in between Flipping stations On my minds frequency He's desperately trying To get to know me But I'm not going to let him know That I'm staring down at The unfolded map before me Not really focusing On his words And warm voice I really don't want to get close I really don't want him to know I just don't want him To be caught up And then leave me If he finds out that I'm somewhere in between... [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (03-11-2002 04:59 PM).] |
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Skyfire![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I don't know what to say to this one. I like it, and I think I know where you're at, but I'm not positive. It's a good read though, thanks! I want to die peacefully, in my sleep, like my grandfather, not screaming, terrified, like his passengers. |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
Kris, this is really good, but I dont think you should be afraid to open up to people, maybe get to know them first, but never keep the real you hidden..Great Write ~Lisa |
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Cinderelly Member
since 2001-12-31
Posts 189NM, USA |
I can totally realte to this . . . I loved the line "Flipping stations, On my minds frequency" ! Life is a moderately good play w/ a badly written thrid act. - Unknown |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
"Little does he know it That I'm somewhere in between Flipping stations On my minds frequency" LOVED those lines...the imagery was awesome. i think you did very well with venting your emotions in this piece kris...more, miss! Zombie |
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Marshalzu![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
I loved the imagery that you managed to capture and the way you managed to air you feelings without them taking over the poem and letting it turn into a rant. thanks for sharing ![]() Andrew "The pin didn't drop it came and crashed down" |
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PoetryIsLife![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Kristen, I enjoyed it. Another great write, my dear. ![]() ~ Titus Will I ever forget what happened today? |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Aww hun this was so sad! Being caught in between is not a horrible place to be. I know the feeling of not wanting people to get too close though...i completely understand. great write! iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf.. |
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