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thoughtless rambling |
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laconic Member
since 2002-02-17
Posts 64Melbourne, Australia |
An open slate dissipitates i'm wracked with thoughtless thoughts that contain hate thoughts of retaliate if only i had a figure to hold to a burning stake would i still be so blue? to release and unsheath pain is that what i choose? i dont know... all said and done, i just dont know i need relief, re-establishment of my beliefs i need time, but i want it now how can i stay patient, when theres so much to do this situations gone, outta, over, through my head.. "so long" what the hell is going on? can somebody tell me? whats wrong with me? somebody help me! i'm at a crossroad, with no road my tales stopped still mostly untold and what can i do? damn.... what do i do? [This message has been edited by SEA (03-10-2002 01:52 PM).] |
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Lennon2002 Junior Member
since 2002-01-10
Posts 31The wV |
I like this style ~Time you enjoy wasting was not wasted.~ John Lennon |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
I really liked it, but I'm not quite sure what to say, at some points it seemed comedic, and at some points it seemed like a cry for help. Maybe thats good, maybe Im weird, or maybe both! Great Job! ~Lisa |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I don't know what to say... I like it definately, but I don't quite know what you were trying to get across. That's okay though!  I want to die peacefully, in my sleep, like my grandfather, not screaming, terrified, like his passengers. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I enjoyed this bunches!! Keep up the great work! iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf.. |
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