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-Queth-
Junior Member

since 2002-02-10

Posts 35
Canada

0 posted 2002-03-09 03:02 PM

In between these worlds, I cannot seem to

Breathe between the silence.

Each piece, each shard, each fragment falling

Lost within a crimson rose.

I feel the rain fall 'pon my face, unearthly

Spectre seeking

The sweetest taste of mortal lips that wait for

Silver's streaking.

And rain doth burn a broken heart,
intertwined within a dream.

Q.u.e.t.h.

Everything in between.

[This message has been edited by -Queth- (03-09-2002 03:06 PM).]

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

1 posted 2002-03-09 09:26 PM

Oh my. I haven't read your work before. Wow!

I want to die peacefully, in my sleep, like my grandfather, not screaming, terrified, like his passengers.

Lennon2002
Junior Member

since 2002-01-10

Posts 31
The wV

2 posted 2002-03-10 12:10 PM

Roknroll poem, you're almost as good as you.

~Time you enjoy wasting was not wasted.~ John Lennon
~I don't believe in death because I'm ready for it- John Lennon

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

3 posted 2002-03-10 01:39 AM

Very cool, -Queth-. It stirs up quite a few thoughts and images in this mind of mine. The use of HTML added to the dramatic appeal of the piece. The strikeout at the end is really symbolic I think. It's wiping out of the broken heart as such.

Anyway, nice write and I look forward to reading many more from you.

~AF~

"Sometimes the only way to stay sane is to go a little crazy." - Susanna Kaysen

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

4 posted 2002-03-10 11:24 PM

Awesome work!!!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

5 posted 2002-03-11 10:42 AM

You always captivate me with your words, and one day I'll be able to get my information straight with who you remind me of..off the bat I know it's the story teller of Arbain Nights..(did I spell it right?) something to that nature..but I can't quite get it right atm..sorry but I love it as usual

Kristen

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

6 posted 2002-03-11 10:13 PM

Hmmmm...interesting...yet---mysterious...

Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth...

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

7 posted 2002-03-13 04:50 AM

OOOOOOOOOO! most most most definately a library piece here Queth!! like lizzy said, very good use of imagery and html. im loving this to its very last letter.
MORE! more from you...NOW!

Zombie

Torn are her limbs
By quiet hands that
Tug life(color) out of her.
Gnawing edges round
Into a broken(satisfying)
Shadow

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

8 posted 2002-03-13 09:18 AM

I really enjoyed reading this poem, the imagery and the language you used were both very beautiful. Thank you for sharing

Andrew

"The pin didn't drop it came and crashed down"

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