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Ceinwyn
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0 posted 2002-03-05 07:28 PM


Hrm...This is weird again I don't like the last lines...

I'm the reflection
Within the depths of your soul
I'm the memory
That is sometimes hard to let go
I'm that smile
Upon your face
And the pain
That time cannot erase
I'm even the one
You still cry about
And the tears
That rip your world apart
I'm the dancing shadows
Flirting within your mind
I'm even the kiss
That you replay a hundred thousand times
I'm even the dream
That haunts you constantly
You might try
To run
And leave it all well behind
But in the end
It's me you will always find...

© Copyright 2002 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved
LCBS
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since 2001-11-29
Posts 532
Connecticut
1 posted 2002-03-05 07:37 PM


I refuse to say my opinion until someone else replys...

(whats that...an invisable reply! ok)

Great Job Kris....I liked this because it seemed to me that you were kind of "harnessing" your pain and using it to write powerful stuff....(either that or I am totally wrong...which is normal....)


~Lisa

Ceinwyn
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2 posted 2002-03-05 07:39 PM


Weirdo:P *shrugs* I'm not saying that you are wrong or that you are right..lol Im confuzzled..anyways hrm..email,dearie? whats up wif it? here if you get this it's pryncess_iseult@hotmail.com..or have I been getting yours wrong..hahah end this madness!!!:P


LCBS
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3 posted 2002-03-05 07:46 PM


You act as though people on this site are normal....!  I just got your newest email today and replied, maybe its just taking a really long time....hmmmm~ Did you get my first one???

and because this is your poems post...

Great Write!

~Lisa

Ceinwyn
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4 posted 2002-03-05 07:51 PM


Thanks and uhh no...but Im really glad you liked it perhaps I'll sleep on it and get back to you in the morning to what it really meant..lol
Erin
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~Chicago~
5 posted 2002-03-05 09:49 PM


Ceinwyn~
This is a really great piece! The end is good but it seems like its drifting away from the poem. Like it shouldnt be there. But I do like it! I always love your work, its like an addiction!! Thanks for sharing this piece!!!

~I thought it was only your loss when we broke up, but it turns out it was mine too~

TigerZ
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since 2002-01-02
Posts 83
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6 posted 2002-03-05 11:13 PM


i loved this one although i cant say why...=) thanks for posting

A life without loveā€¦is no life at all.

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7 posted 2002-03-10 11:42 PM


I like to believe that we live on in each person we meet in a little way Great piece !

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

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