Teen Poetry #5 |
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Eulogy Called Regret |
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xerxes Junior Member
since 2001-08-05
Posts 34 |
Fell behind Losing time All tangled webs become difficult to unwind Though I’m tarnished and unkind Hard to find You loved me Through Misery, Greed, Jealousy Regret owns no happy ending Feelings lovely, words hatefully Painfully Destroying me Where did I go? My reflection unknown Smiles grown cold All the things I never told Acting bold Wrong decisions I chose Punishment, I suppose For the soul I sold The smoke I blow These words I throw. -Xerxes [This message has been edited by xerxes (02-27-2002 03:31 AM).] |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
i liked this very much, it was a rather sad sort of poem, but it had a very good flow to it. nicely written ![]() Zombie |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Regret owns no happy ending That it doesn't. Although the pieces theme is rather unhappy, the way you've written it is certainly unique. This would make a wonderful long Eulogy but for now, the shorter version in the form of a poem works for it. Interesting ideas lurking in those lines. Some I can feel have an undercurrent that would make a fun exercise to decipher. Until I get that bored, I'll have to sit here knowing that you've written an extremely deep and profound piece. Thank you for sharing. ~AF~ "Sometimes the only way to stay sane is to go a little crazy." - Susanna Kaysen |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Though I’m tarnished and unkind Hard to find You loved me Through Misery, Greed, Jealousy" this part was really well done, it is what spoke the loudest to me.....a great write ![]() |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
"All tangled webs become difficult to unwind" Sometimes I feel this way...other times I feel it is not only difficult, but impossible, you did a great job expressing thought and ideas, and I especially liked the title ~lisa |
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Words_of_Glitter Member
since 2000-10-25
Posts 90USA |
That was just the greatest thing ever possibly...well, I really did enjoy it and I think it makes people realize that they should just do whatever it is they want and whatever makes them happy. You miss 100% of the shots you don't take If you don't look at it as a basketball quote, it is good for life too! "Time really does fly by and no one knows where it goes, so if you have something to say or do, say or do it now." |
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since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
The words you used flowed nicely....i enjoyed this a lot. Keep em coming iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf.. |
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