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xerxes
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0 posted 2002-02-26 09:14 PM


Let me just recall
The longest night, my farthest fall
Escaping from you all.
Longing for myself
Some beautiful help.
So the shore I left
Making the journey to secrets kept
Repay my tormented debt.
The ocean calls for me
Without any regard of regretting
I found myself in the water stepping
Happily
I’m ready.
Swimming farther out, farther away
I see the light, I follow her wave
The ocean, she holds me close, she cries for my days.
But the tides push me back towards the beach
I struggle to move on, with each stroke, I reach
I’ve longed for the ocean, lived for us to finally meet.
She still pushes me back
I think she’s crying, but I’m still trying
I want to be there, but she doesn’t want that
Then all I saw went black.
I awoke soaked in her watchful tears, sprinkled in sand
She brought me back here to this bittersweet land
When all I wanted was to be with her, to just touch her hand
Find her currents that would always understand.
It’s been some time since then
Soon, I’ll go back to visit her again.
I wonder if she misses me?
Is she patiently waiting?
While I’m anxiously anticipating.
I’ll get to hold her
Wash away days blurred
To be with her swimming forever, never tortured
My ocean,
My desperate swim
She whispers for me in my sleep, a heart drowned on the ocean floor.
Still, my mentality at war
And all I can do is just miss her more.
-Xerxes

[This message has been edited by xerxes (02-28-2002 02:27 AM).]

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cherish
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since 2001-03-25
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swimming in fairy floss...........
1 posted 2002-02-28 03:48 AM


wwo... ...this is breathtakingly beautifully written!i know you were touching onto a very sensative topic, but i think you gave the topic enough justice. wonderfully writen, just be mindful of the guidelines...there are meanies who might take your poem and run away with it.
again, i thought that this was a very good piece from you

Zombie

Torn are her limbs
By quiet hands that
Tug life(color) out of her.
Gnawing edges round
Into a broken(satisfying)
Shadow

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2 posted 2002-03-03 05:26 PM


A beautiful read, thank you for sharing this with us, I liked the imagery that you used.

Zu

If you see this message I have just replied to your poem. I have poems as well *hint*

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3 posted 2002-03-03 10:05 PM


this was amazing hun...really great write thanks for sharing

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