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LCBS
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since 2001-11-29

Posts 532
Connecticut

0 posted 2002-02-26 05:43 PM

Plagued by her broken dreams
She sleeps no more at night
constantly overthinking things
Wishing she'd done them right
Haunted by her broken vows
She can't control her tears
Happiness she wont allow
Lost in a world of fears
Pressure weighing down on her
From all the ones she loves
her lifes just become a blur
just wants to rise above
Compromising with her heart
She's constantly sinking
her lifes being torn apart
from the "what ifs" shes thinking
Chasing non exsistant joy
her hopes she does exhaust
a thriving life she did destroy
a beautiful soul she lost
Now she lives in isolation
and no one can understand
thats she sinking into desperation
with each of their demands

~LCBS

Exeryone makes mistake, learn from them and move on, because tomorrow we'll make more...

[This message has been edited by LCBS (02-26-2002 06:16 PM).]

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

1 posted 2002-02-26 06:11 PM

Sounds almost like one of my poems...tough stuff, but a good poem..lemme know if you want to talk.

-Adam

"If life is so significant, then why do we die?"

LCBS
Senior Member

since 2001-11-29

Posts 532
Connecticut

2 posted 2002-02-26 06:17 PM

Thanks adam, I've learned a lot from reading your poetry lately. And its very comforting to know that my friends on pip are always here for when I need them. Thanks for your response, and for helping with the inspiration....

~LCBS

Exeryone makes mistake, learn from them and move on, because tomorrow we'll make more...

Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

3 posted 2002-02-26 06:28 PM

How do you do it? heheh I replied to your response to my other poem..hrm..I should have put it in this..I was going to respond earlier but I didnt really know what to say but now I know..if you ever need to talk..you just call me

Kris

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

4 posted 2002-02-28 04:42 AM

i can relate to this SO very much its uncanny...library piece

Zombie

Torn are her limbs
By quiet hands that
Tug life(color) out of her.
Gnawing edges round
Into a broken(satisfying)
Shadow

LCBS
Senior Member

since 2001-11-29

Posts 532
Connecticut

5 posted 2002-03-01 11:54 PM

Bump Bump!

(sorry I REALLY like this one and I worked hard on it....)

Heavens Tears

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since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

6 posted 2002-03-02 01:29 PM

This was a great poem, maybe one of your best. I think it deserves a bump (but some people dont like it much when you bump your own poems). I cant wait to see more!

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

7 posted 2002-03-02 07:15 PM

Hey...this was very Adam-ish! (Like pointed out before) Hmmm...well done! I like Adam's style---and you add your own flavour to it! It's like hotdogs---with spice!!!

Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth...

Honey
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since 2001-10-09

Posts 92
Hot girl From Canada

8 posted 2002-03-02 08:43 PM

loved it!

It Feels As If I've Always Been Someone On The Outside Looking In.

He Who Laughs Last Thinks Slowest!!

dastard
Member

since 2001-07-14

Posts 55
in tearing silence

9 posted 2002-03-03 02:37 AM

*shudders* dark.. but very good!

"Pain doesn't hurt when it's all you've ever felt" ~Marie, the girl of a thousand truths

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

10 posted 2002-03-03 03:21 AM

sounds like my life...great poem

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

See me?
Member

since 2002-02-13

Posts 93
UK

11 posted 2002-03-03 04:10 AM

I can relate so closely to this, although its not a happy poem great all the same
Clare x

Life is about change,sometimes its painful,sometimes its beautiful,sometimes its both.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

12 posted 2002-03-03 10:40 PM

I can relate to this...nicely done and great poem as usual!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

13 posted 2002-03-04 12:22 PM

Wow..... this is an awsome piece and it relates perfectly to what I'm going through right now.I hope everything gets better for you because I know how much it sucks.
Lauren

Voiceless
Senior Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 686
Under the stars upon the wind

14 posted 2002-03-05 10:00 PM

This is my life in poem form.
I was seriously just stressing out
about this..
Thank you for posting this,
and expressing what I couldn't..

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

skyshine

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since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

15 posted 2002-07-07 11:32 AM

I know this so well, and I know a lot of other people do too. Very well done. This was something I really felt.

~sky

You look inside my wild mind
never knowing what you'll find
still I want you all the time
yeah I do
'cause you get me
~Michelle Branch

DancinQueen

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since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

16 posted 2002-07-15 03:03 AM

wow..

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

akira
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since 2002-07-13

Posts 79
Idaho

17 posted 2002-07-15 05:21 AM

very good, i like it alot and i'd love to have your opinion on my writings...

Akira
www.poetrypoems.com/akira
Aol/Aim name: mjhawaii50
Yahoo Messenger name: Akiras_Fire
Email: [email protected]

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