Teen Poetry #5 |
Love Lost |
babygurl * Junior Member
since 2001-12-07
Posts 30 |
September, October, the darkness grows The chill winter wind wraps her in its arms Freezing the teardrops Never to melt the ice in her veins Remembering the joy they once shared She looks in the mirror and no one is there The ending, so swift, yet, love's still alive The past is the present, it can't be denied Spoken for then... but no longer needed A heart in two pieces, cut so deep A love, she thought, they were meant to keep She knows her heart will never be free Never to love again She reflects on the past Soft flowers in a datebook From a happier time The voice that caressed The love that enflamed Words, remembered with a sad smile Hopes for a future, that wasn't to be Not understanding, this twist to destiny The sunset loses its beauty The wind carries her away Another end to a long lonely day Blue eyes watching the darkness She sits through the night Wondering why... Oh why Must his memory linger ....... This has nothing really to do with whats going on in my life i just like the poem... my friends and i wrote it a very long time ago.... VERY long time ago [This message has been edited by babygurl * (02-20-2002 02:47 PM).] |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Good work!!! I dont know why but this part really caught my attention more then the rest did. Not understanding, this twist to destiny The sunset loses its beauty The wind carries her away Another end to a long lonely day ~ShAtTeReD mEmOrIeS, |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was such a good post!!! Nicely done and keep em coming!!! mE & cHrIsTiNe GaVe A WhOlE nEw mEaNiNg tO ThE wOrD "iNcOgNiTo" |
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babygurl * Junior Member
since 2001-12-07
Posts 30 |
thanks guys.. great reply's.. this poem is about two of my friends who were going out and then they broke up and then i wrote that poem... then they started going out again... its a really screwed up story... but yeah |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Hey, Jackie! You're a great poet! Your writing style is simple---yet...beautiful! It's hard to explain! Just---keep writing poetry...one day, babe---you'll be a star!!! Lol, and call me!!! Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
good poem. I thought you did well on it. Looking forward to more. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Really good job, very expressive and had a nice flow to it. I was impressed keep writing please! The day you were born, you were born free |
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