Teen Poetry #5 |
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As I Lay Here Dying |
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LucidityNow Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 118Canada |
Hello everyone, I havent been here for such a long time. I think the only one of you I remember is Dopey Dope. (I used to have a different account with more posts) Anyways I am trying to come out of my writing slump and become more active again so hopefully you will be seeing alot more of me. This is a repost from a while back, i just fixed it up a bit. As I lay here dying I wonder why I even tried to save that man being held at gunpoint. As I lay here dying I think about my day and the path I chose to take that ended at this spot. Maybe had I slept in? Maybe had I walked the dog? Maybe had I watched T.V? I would not have been here dying now. I look at the other man and realize he is dead. In my vain attempt to save that slob I have signed away my life and future... And as I wither and die, I cry for I will only be remembered for what I've done and not for who I am... Now I beg for sleep in agony bleeding on my concrete pillow. Numb, and cold, I can not breath. My awareness collapses in around me like a tidal wave of pain and darkness smashing me, out of reality. and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me... |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow, this is so deep....but you have to realize, is that this "person" took a chance, and it was about helping another human being....that is a beautiful thing, no matter how you slice it....I liked this poem very much, and will try to keep an eye out on further posts from you....hopefully that writer's block is gone ![]() |
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See me? Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 93UK |
this is a great post, really makes u think how one action can change everything. keep on posting i look forward to reading more of ur work. Just wondering is this fiction or truth? plz reply and once again great stuff! Clare x |
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since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
"Maybe had I slept in? Maybe had I walked the dog? Maybe had I watched T.V?" Life is full of "what if's?" and "coulda, shoulda, woulda's" but the reality is that everything happens for a reason in my opinion. This was a great poem and rather deep. I can tell you put a lot of feeling and emotion into this. Great job! mE & cHrIsTiNe GaVe A WhOlE nEw mEaNiNg tO ThE wOrD "iNcOgNiTo" |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
I find myself wondering the what ifs all the time....but I would never doubt trying to save a life Great Post ~lisa Exeryone makes mistake, learn from them and move on, because tomorrow we'll make more... |
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