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DawnG
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0 posted 2002-02-14 01:07 AM


I've been reading all of your poetry, and not sharing any of mine with you. For Valentine's Day, I thought I'd share one of my poems with you all. Now if only cupid would find me someone to read this to.... I hope you all enjoy as much as I've enjoyed reading your works.
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Looking Into My Eyes

Looking into my eyes...,
What do you see?
Do you see the love from me to you?

Looking into my eyes...
Your gateway to my world,
Do you see many dreams waiting
                       to be unfurled?

Looking into my eyes...
Your window to my soul
Do you see the bars taking their toll?

Looking into my eyes...
Do you see how much I care?
Loving every minute you are there.

Looking into your eyes...
What do I see?
I see a man yearning to be free.

Looking into your eyes...
My gateway to your world,
I see a man with a heart
                   beautiful as a pearl.

Looking into your eyes...
Do I see how much you care?
For if you didn't you wouldn't be there.

Look into our eyes...
What do you see?
The love we share from him to me.

Security in knowing our love will set us free.


[This message has been edited by DawnG (02-15-2002 12:21 AM).]

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1 posted 2002-02-14 01:24 AM


Dawn your writing is so beautiful! I love reading it! Thanks for sharing!

I never realised I could still love until I met him...

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2 posted 2002-02-14 08:41 PM


When I look into your eyes I see a great poet and a beautiful soul!!!!!I hope you post more often, and your comments are always appreciated

~Lisa

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3 posted 2002-02-14 09:25 PM


this is so beautiful that it makes everyone look a little closer to people.  i do hope you keep writing. it looks like you have gotten to a great start.
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4 posted 2002-02-14 09:28 PM


-DawnG-

Aww, this is so pretty! -smiles- I thought the repetitions throughout the poem really emphasized the message here. Thank you for sharing with us, and happy Valentine's Day! -smiles-


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Everything in between...
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