Teen Poetry #5 |
Forgive Me |
HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
Forgive me for I can't be the one you seek the one you need Forgive Me I did not see that it was me who hurt least Forgive me for it's only me just my heart you see bleeding in the street Forgive Me but you don't see that all the love in me went to the girl you used to be Forgive Me if cold I seem if loves gleam has faded in me Forgive Me for loving you for holding true to my views Forgive Me for now I see the one who really needs to be forgiven, is you. *************************************************** Not My best work, I'll admit. I decided to try something different, an inspiration from a friend. Well, I wouldn't post if I didn't want criticism, so tell me: What do you think? [This message has been edited by HopelessRomanticGuy (02-11-2002 10:06 PM).] |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great post, what more can I say??? It hurts to love, but without love, where are we??? Keep it up!! MelZ!!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Seems I am always the one saying Forgive me for these very same things. Hope you find your girlfriend again soon. Dawn |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
enjoyed the read, thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
it was a good poem and i hope all works out we all make mistakes |
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