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-Queth-
Junior Member

since 2002-02-10

Posts 35
Canada

0 posted 2002-02-10 09:50 PM

Her soul faintly touching, opening her languid, blue-eyed ice

Hand reaching warmth within the finely dusted air.

A shadow dances 'cross a pot that held her ivory rice

With a waft of faraway India, dreaming on a silver chair.

Sailing on an ocean's waves, floating on a moonlit sea

And seeking stars, each holding tight a purple piece of sky,

She walked upon the empty docks, as midnight taught her how to breathe

Her sari danced against the wind

...its colours taught her how to cry.

02.10.02

[An poem based on memories based on vision, imagination, and scent. Meter is not important, although rhyming is.]

Q.u.e.t.h.

Everything in between...

[This message has been edited by -Queth- (02-10-2002 09:56 PM).]

DawnG

Senior Member

since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

1 posted 2002-02-10 10:51 PM

Queth,

Let me be the first to welcome you to Piptalk. I think your first offering to us is absolutely beautiful, and I'm looking forward to reading many more poems in the future. Please check your e mail for a special welcome.

Dawn

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

2 posted 2002-02-11 04:19 AM

wonderful...truly a beautiful piece of poetry you have here.

WELCOME!

life's not about who wins or loses, or about whos got the better car,or the most money. it's about living,and trying to make the best of what we have.

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

3 posted 2002-02-11 07:57 AM

Welcome to Passions!!

Wow! I am awestruck at the moment. The imagery is absolutely fantastic and I can tell that you are going to be a welcome addition to a big blue pages.
I disagree with your meter being unimportant. I find that properly constructed rhyming pieces need meter to read well but that's just me.

I look forward to many more wonderful pieces from you in the future. Please remember that curtesy is important so reply as well as post. Other than that, enjoy it here. Venture out and look into the other sections of Passions if you get the chance. There is much to get out of this site that you may not find in the walls of Teen.

Thanks for posting this. I enjoyed the read.

~AF~

If this is all the world has to offer, I want a refund on my life.

Tamma

Senior Member

since 2000-01-17

Posts 794
In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV

4 posted 2002-02-11 09:44 AM

This is simply a beautiful first post

I've been kind of coming and going around PiP lately, and its poems like this that make me wanna be here as much as possible

Welcome To Passions
and thank you for the reply to my poem

If I held a star everytyme
he made me smile,I'd have the
evening sky in my palm, if
one was removed for every tear
he caused, I'd be emptyhanded.

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

5 posted 2002-02-11 01:59 PM

Wow! Queth was it? Let me say "Hi! Welcome to PiP!"

Well, for your first post here...I can say that you rock! Painted by your words, the world of poetry is mearly your eaisel! I can tell! I can't wait to read more from you! Becautifully done!!!

~ Alex-Lee

Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth...

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

6 posted 2002-02-11 01:59 PM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

I really enjoyed your first piece..it was truly full of emotion. I cant wait to read more from you..i hope you enjoy it here! Welcome again!

mE & cHrIsTiNe GaVe A WhOlE nEw mEaNiNg tO ThE wOrD "iNcOgNiTo"

Voiceless
Senior Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 686
Under the stars upon the wind

7 posted 2002-02-11 07:26 PM

Welcome....
so how are you?
Okay yeah back to the poem.
I enjoyed this very much!
Good job!
Keep posting!

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

8 posted 2002-02-12 02:14 PM

Welcome to PIP Queth.

Wonderfuly first post. It was beautiful. Can't wait to read more from you.
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I know Im not perfect but I can smile
& I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

9 posted 2002-02-12 06:16 PM

Welcome, sorry if I was on my sugar binge I'd be a bit more expressive:P but anyways, I really enjoyed reading your poem and your words flowed well, I hope to read more soon..

Kristen

JBaker515

Member

since 2001-02-28

Posts 458
Dartmouth College

10 posted 2002-02-12 06:32 PM

This is really well done.

welcome to Passions....

I hope you enjoy it here, make sure you reply to others work as well as post your own, its more fun that way.

I am sure every agrees with me...

WELCOME..

~~Jeff~~

[This message has been edited by JBaker515 (02-12-2002 06:32 PM).]

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

11 posted 2002-02-12 06:38 PM

Hey Hey Hey! This poem is wonderful! GREAT fot a first post. And on that note,

Welcome To Passions!!!

I hope to see many more great poems from you!

-Rich

After Love comes Pain, then Love, Then Pain, then Love, then Pain..... does anyone else see a pattern here? Oh well, can't say it's not worth it.

Maverick Heart
New Member

since 2002-02-12

Posts 3
In the darkness of my mind...

12 posted 2002-02-12 06:40 PM

Lovely work, Queth. I expect great things from you in the future.

Who's going to save those who're already dead?

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