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give me a title!! |
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inspiredpoetwriter Member
since 2002-01-05
Posts 104Minnesota |
In my heart I know I'll always love you My sister, my friend forever Tomorrow comes The days fly by But our memories, They will last the rest of our lives In the night My dreams come alive I see you there Waiting right by my side Together we run in the valley of magic. You take my hand And we run to a place Where pain doesn't exist Together We're content Everything's as it should be We're in complete bliss And if we're both silent We just might hear The sound of a butterfly's kiss. Each time you smile I see your heart light up When tears fall I will wipe them away Laughter is heard from miles away Surrounded by music so heavenly Sweet daisies dance at our feet. As the music dies I begin to awake And sadness fills my eyes For we are no longer together, my friend Sadly my dream has come to an end. By: Ang n Jen ¥¤¥¤¥¥¤¥¤¥iM a PoEt WhO wRiTeZ Wit HeR Heart ¥¤¥¤¥¥¤¥¤¥ |
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DawnG 
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
inspiredpoetwriter, This is an absolutely beautiful yet sad piece. I'm sorry your dream had to end. As far as a title, I'll be back to try to help you with that one.  Dawn |
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Devils Angel 666 Member
since 2001-11-30
Posts 71CT, USA |
Sad yet beautiful peice as Dawn has said. I like this write and I'm sorry that your dream had come to an end. I'll keep thinking of a title for you as well! ~Dan |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The ending was a bit of a twist. I thought that was good in the poem. As a whole, it was well done. I enjoyed it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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