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Teen Poetry #5

Look at me, take your chance

LCBS
Senior Member

since 2001-11-29

Posts 532
Connecticut

0 posted 2002-02-05 06:43 PM

You looked at me with eyes so deep
and whispered in my ear
You held me close for hours long
And wiped away a tear
I looked at you with a timid soul
and you returned my glance
tucked a hair behind my ear
Now was our only chance
You grabbed me by the arm, we fled
took me dancing in the rain
and flashed your intoxicating grin
That smile kept me sane
We kissed that night below the stars
And you pledged your love for me
But then I realized it wasn't real
It was a dream of what I'd hoped we'd be

~LCBS

[This message has been edited by LCBS (02-05-2002 10:03 PM).]

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2002-02-05 06:46 PM

it's beautiful

even if only a dream

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

2 posted 2002-02-05 07:24 PM

I liked this....disillusionment is always a favorite subject. Good work.

-Adam

"If life is so significant, then why do we die?"

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2002-02-06 10:42 AM

WHat a romantic dream! The imagery was great

I hope your dream comes true one day

BoOsH bOoSh nApoLE

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

4 posted 2002-02-06 12:03 PM

i liked this~ the flow was very good. i like those poems you read and the beat is constant and steady. excellent job...that goes for the imagery too...great poem. keep posting

*dq

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

FlipAngel02
New Member

since 2002-01-26

Posts 7
Minnesota, USA

5 posted 2002-02-06 01:21 PM

Great poem! I loved how you described the dream...very romantic. I can really relate to what you're feeling in this poem-I think a lot of us can! Keep up the good work.

Take your chances, or someone else will.

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