Teen Poetry #5 |
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Save a little love for me. |
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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
I’ll be back as soon as I can I’ll be back to hold your hand I’ll be back tomorrow So baby save a little love for me. I’ll be home from this city I’ll be home hoping you miss me I’ll be home tonight So baby save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. So baby save a little love for me. I‘ll be gone for the weekend I’ll miss you but it’s not the end I’m be home on Monday So baby save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. So baby save a little love for me. It’s so cold when I’m gone Cause I’m not where I belong One more night and I’m home again I’ll be home again…. So baby save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. So baby save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. So baby save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
let me see... what i gather from this poem, especially the last 17 lines is that you want thsi person to save a little love for you? LOL this is okay, i think it could do without so much repetition especially where you wrote the "save a little love for me" choruses so many times. i couldn't concentrate on the verses haha but oh well... this ain't bad.... Valerie "...And i want to take you down, but your soul could not be found, doesn't matter much you see cause your disease is killing me..." -Saliva [This message has been edited by ~sugarpie313~ (edited 07-09-2001).] |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I hope she does save a little love for you. I liked this one.....I usually just put a (x3) or something....like save a little love for me x8 Saves up space....but anyhow. I liked this one. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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punkrockerrobin![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
okies me likes this poem! baby i'll save more than a little love for ya lol great poem! robin I AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL! |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Hey, I thought this one was really good. I agree, it could do without so much repetition. I won't save a lil love for u, tho, I've already given it all away. ![]() - Cody - |
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since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Honestly, I didnt care for the repitition all that much, but if this was a song maybe I would like it. That is just what it seemed like to me. *Amanda* |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
beautiful job on the song..very sweet and nice ![]() im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
thats some great lyrics there. Hope you get it back ![]() hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
It sounds like a barry white song or the song "midnight train to georgia" i liked it, hope a little bit of love is saved for you. REgina |
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