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Teen Poetry #5

You're Not What Everyone Thinks You Are

luckyducky_505
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since 2001-04-29

Posts 53
Kentucky, USA

0 posted 2002-02-03 08:37 PM

**This is coming to em right as I'm writing it -- so bare with me here**
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You were sweet and you were nice,
Infront of others but not behind.

To my mom and my grandma you were the best,
But to me you were mean, controlling and rude.

How could you fool others into liking you?
How could you do that to your friends and loved ones?

I think you need some hospitialized help,
A guidance counsler or something,
You have some issues you need to clear beofre you ever come back here!

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**okay it's not that good, probably one of my worst but it's what I feel so whatver floats a boat!**

If you wanna be somebody, If you wanna go somewhere, you gotta wake-up and pay attention. ~Sister Act 2~
~Whoopi Goldberg~

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

1 posted 2002-02-03 10:12 PM

I think its just fine. You explained your feelings about this well as well as the situation..nicely done..short and sweet

BoOsH bOoSh nApoLE

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

2 posted 2002-02-04 02:49 PM

That wasn't so bad off the fly...now was it?

"Snake, always remember that your mind if your most dangerous weapon. If things get too complicated---simplify your thoughts!

Erin
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since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

3 posted 2002-02-09 06:00 AM

Poetry isnt good or bad...Its the feelings you are expressing...And obviously you got out just what you wanted to...

If you want something very badly, set it free. If it comes back to you, its yours forever, if it doesnt, it was never yours to begin with"

sleepymoongirl
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since 2001-04-19

Posts 157
bc canada

4 posted 2002-02-09 04:21 PM

wow that poem is how i was feeling about some girl but i'm guessing this poem is about someone in your family and i hope that things work out the best for you hope to read more of your work =D

as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u.

DawnG

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since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

5 posted 2002-02-09 08:33 PM

luckyducky,

To me what makes a poem good or bad is if you are able to express to your readers the emotion and message behind your poem. Both of these things I feel you have done wonderfully and I can truly relate to how you are feeling.

Dawn

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