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Ceinwyn
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0 posted 2002-02-02 01:59 PM


I'm upon my knees
In desperate prayer tonight
Soul exposed beneath the stars
And the moonlight
My fears are menacing
And my lack of direction fatal
But here I am
Drowning within my feelings
Of lack of perfection
And lack of the knowledge
To ever knowing where I should be heading
I believe I'm a failure
Amongst my circle of friends
At night
I beg and I plead
To God to bring it to an end
No longer do I want
To disappointment myself
Let alone disappoint
The ones who hold me close
Within their treasured dreams
And yet I am too blind to see
Still I run within the darkened chambers
Of my miserable soul
Not hearing or feeling the feelings they hold
Why do I run
I actually don't know
I end up bleeding, crying
Torturing myself
And not allowing them to get close
To save me from my personal hell..



[This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (02-02-2002 01:59 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-02-02 03:46 PM


This was very well written and it flowed very nicely..i enjoyed this...thanks for sharing kristin

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HopelessRomanticGuy
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since 2001-08-17
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2 posted 2002-02-02 10:11 PM


Great poem, wonderful flow, but it is a terrible feeling, the endless self torture.  I have been down those same corridors within my soul many a time, I share your pain.  I'm sorry.

After Love comes Pain, then Love, Then Pain, then Love, then Pain..... does anyone else see a pattern here?  Oh well, can't say it's not worth it.

Kosetsu
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3 posted 2002-02-02 10:17 PM


Ah...back to the dark brooding poetry? Nice...

-Adam

"If life is so significant, then why do we die?"

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