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The Death if of a young girl
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The Death if of a young girl |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
The death of a young girl I was once a young girl both beautiful and smart but now I am a lonely soul with many a broken heart Since I was young I’ve wondered how could I reach perfection and for every time I’ve blundered I’ve looked deep inside for correction Is perfection really there and just somewhere I cant find and if so, please tell me where before I lose my mind Everywhere I look I find yet another flaw My failures fill volumes, book after book Pictures much too painful to draw I try to help and save myself perfection shows no mercy I know I have a world of wealth but the monster seems to curse me and yet the monster doesn’t stop there he feels he must punish all all of those for whom I care backing me up against a wall So now I sit here all alone no friends by my side perfection just doesn’t condone all the faults of mine It doesn’t just effect my mind my self confidence non existent deep inside myself I find my strive for perfection persistent Mentally and physically the monster takes its toll I’m robbed of individuality help me to save my soul and once again I repeat I am sitting here in isolation I can’t conquer the amazing feat of overcoming perfectionism The monster may have beaten me I can understand this now I only wish young girls could see What there minds wont allow Where charisma once stood is now an empty space I never lived up to what I could I’m dead inside…just another face I was once a young girl both beautiful and smart but now I am a lonely soul with many a broken heart *Perfectionism deal with everything you do, from school activities to your body image, perfectionism is a disease. Usually it is accompanied by OCD, and it can really effect your life. I was drowning in my own tears, until you threw me a life preserver |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was a very informative piece and really expresses the struggles one can go through with this disease...::Hugs:: i think your incredibly strong for coping with this the way you do...::hugs:: BoOsH bOoSh nApoLE |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
It's hard, always striving to achieve what dosen't exist on earth, always saying, "I'm not good enough." It takes one with strength to cope with and survive this disease, as xShUgArHiGhx said. A very well-written poem, I hope to see more from you. After Love comes Pain, then Love, Then Pain, then Love, then Pain..... does anyone else see a pattern here? Oh well, can't say it's not worth it. |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Great job here. I really hope that you can get help or talk to someone you trust about this. All of us a PIP are here for you, and email me if you ever need to talk. |
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gracianna Member
since 2002-02-17
Posts 165A 14 year hell |
Wow...can I relate to that one... I give a whole new meaning to the word 'sad.' |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
I can totally relate and my Dad is very much a perfectionist and it feels I can never please him. It's hard. Thanks for writing and sharing this piece. Dawn |
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gracianna Member
since 2002-02-17
Posts 165A 14 year hell |
so true...so sad... I give a whole new meaning to the word 'sad.' |
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TigerZ Member
since 2002-01-02
Posts 83Ontario, Canada |
wow...=) simply awesome!!! what you wanted to say you really expressed and like every line is true...=) this ones going into my library A life without love…is no life at all. |
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