Teen Poetry #5 |
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attempted love poem |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hey all. i'm not exactly the best writer of love poetry, but the feeling is truly there. please read and reply honestly. thank you, i appreciate it. -bergundy- raindrops lightly spatter the top of my roof as i gather my thoughts in order to write this attempted love poem for you i never know what to say and my fingers ache from the countless times i've tried to capture my feelings for you they're pure even when i feel my soul is smudged and bruised. guileless... even when it's hard for me to be yet these words seem so trivial in this time of actual happiness but i've always felt the need to record my thoughts and preserve my words in the form of verse so Matty.. know that i love you and never grow tired of saying those three simple words that relate my feelings better then this entire piece !bergundy! maybe i'll catch fire, something nice to warm me. something pure to burn away the darkness, that hides inside my mind. -alkaline trio- |
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sillywilly Junior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 33oklahoma |
Don't worry, you did a great job writing a love poem. A great poem is purely a matter of opinion. Great job expressing yourself. Keep it up! |
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cutiepiesugarbabie Member
since 2002-06-07
Posts 110A Cloud In the Sky |
can u really put love into words? good poem! ![]() o*~Everyone makes mistakes-get over them and make more tomorrow!~*o |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
=) aww thanks. that is a good point, that love is really difficult to put into words. thanks for replying to this, it means lots and lots to me. be happy. -bergundy- maybe i'll catch fire, something nice to warm me. something pure to burn away the darkness, that hides inside my mind. -alkaline trio- |
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SavingGrace Junior Member
since 2002-05-31
Posts 26not yet found |
any time your true feelings are poured out in a poem, it is good. i actually feel your feelings in this so therefore it is warranted as a good write! ~*Grace*~ |
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twitchy New Member
since 2002-05-29
Posts 4 |
i dont know what to say....that was great berg. i thinks thats one of the best ive read by you but you know i have my reasons for that too.... m Sanity now and beyond me |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
thanks matt... -berg haha it's elvis! maybe i'll catch fire, something nice to warm me. something pure to burn away the darkness, that hides inside my mind. -alkaline trio- [This message has been edited by fearing-laughter (06-27-2002 05:38 AM).] |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Hey! I really liked this. It was interesting, cause it was written about writing a love poem, or the lack of being able to do so... Yet, it was a love poem... strange. lol I really liked it, though. Great write. - Cody - |
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Deep_Inside Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377i can't stop hiding |
this was a good poem. it shwos how hard it is to write a love poem and that gives the poem more meaning -thanks for the read- Thank you for your time :shy: |
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StellarChica Member
since 2002-07-06
Posts 207floating down a river... |
that was great. it was honest and told it like it is.. and it's hard to describe feelings like that in writing. I think you did an outstanding job, though! ![]() *~ERIN~* |
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Skyfire![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
This is just beautiful. That's all I have to say. |
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