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PoetryIsLife

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since 2001-10-27

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...in my boxers...

0 posted 2002-01-26 03:18 PM

The little mouse peers,
staring from his little hole,
in that typical wall.
He is meek, he is weak;
he lives his life,
his world that little hole,
in that typical wall.

In the universe that is his,
he pauses, thinking, his tale flicking;
yes, humans, that's what they're called,
four of them live, amazing creatures.
So strong, so powerful.
But strange creatures, they are.
He, from his little hole,
in that typical wall,
hears yelling, hears fighting.
All the noise, it's too much
for his feeble ears, and heart.
Mostly it's confusing, none of it,
none of it making sense.
Sometimes he hears fights.
Why, oh why, do these creatures
resort to such physical rage?
The weak, like he, are prayed upon.

Day in, and day out,
so many small, so many priceless
meaningful, beautiful things
they do miss, on by they go.
The tender love, the tender care,
the little things they miss.
And this emotion, he can't comprehend.
It causes tears, it causes embrace.
Hearts become one, before his eyes.
The mouse sits, deep in thought.
He wonders what it feels like,
to be so... in overwhelming love.
There is pain, but love overpowers,
true love overpowers all.
He longs to experience this journey.
Suddenly, unexplicably,
a foreign, unfamiliar sensation
roles, ever so slowly, down his furry face.

PoetryIsLife

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1 posted 2002-01-26 03:21 PM

I know this is differnt

but I'm exploring in my poetry, trying different styles, different paths. This came to me, and it just tugged at my heart. Enjoy if you wish.

Please be patient, I'm trying to get my poetry back up to the level I once was at. Ting To Chai!

Sincerely,
Titus

Find me a pidgeon, and then I'll know where Zu and Sky are.

Marshalzu

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2 posted 2002-01-26 04:37 PM

Absoloutly wonderful Titus, I am in awe this is truly a great piece, I love it... the world from the view of a mouse, it is a very original idea

Andrew

Find me a problem a pigeon can't solve and I'll find you a pigeon to solve it.

gymnast
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since 2001-11-18

Posts 80
Scotland.

3 posted 2002-01-26 04:59 PM

I loved this poem! It has lots of hidden messages which are really meaningfull when found. A different kind of poem from what I usually like-but it's great I love it!!!

Keep It Up!!!

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

4 posted 2002-01-26 10:53 PM

Its a nice kinda different qt

I enjoyed this a lot..interesting and refreshing!! Keep on exploring

The outcomes r nice!

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

[This message has been edited by xShUgArHiGhx (01-26-2002 10:54 PM).]

PoetryIsLife

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5 posted 2002-01-27 06:01 PM

Thank you, everyone.

Titus

Find me a pidgeon, and then I'll know where Zu and Sky are.

Fading Away

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Posts 3131
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6 posted 2002-01-28 07:07 PM

Different, indeed... but different is often a good thing

I certainly enjoyed this. Many metaphors, and thought-provoking lines.
Well done, Titus!

--Marie

I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone.

chasing rain
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since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

7 posted 2002-01-28 10:43 PM

So cute...^_^ KAWAIINESS!!!
I love it...so typical of you, Titus. ^^; Hee. Into me library this goes...

-Leah

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

PoetryIsLife

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8 posted 2002-01-29 03:41 PM

Thanks you two!

Titus

Find me a pidgeon, and then I'll know where Zu and Sky are.

Skyfire

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9 posted 2002-08-18 11:18 PM

I missed this one too... What a lesson you managed to stick in this one

I want a copy of it!

vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

10 posted 2002-08-19 01:52 PM

You're right, this is different, in that I don't believe any other piece has grabbed me the way this one did! This was definitely a really unique idea with the view from the mouse and all. I liked it a real lot, and I hope to see more soon!! If this is what you get when you "explore" new poetry, don't stop the exploration!! Great work!!!

Always,
Nikki

     *~Fighting for your love~*
    *~Is something I cannot do~*
   *~I'm not good enough to win~*
*~And I'm not strong enough to lose~*

PoetryIsLife

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11 posted 2002-08-21 04:51 PM

What sort of copy?

Thanks, Nik. It's nice seeing you around here.

Sincerely,
Titus

"I'll prepare myself, and one day my time will come."
-Abraham Lincoln

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