Teen Poetry #5 |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
An hour glass waits silently to be upturned to hold a mortal's fate, And a pair of white-tinted spectacles lie blind. A wooden desk within a musky library, dark from being unused As a light flickers on behind a door. A man in a chair holds his book high His specs forgotten in a dark library. The leather couch sticks to the skin of his neck As his gray hair turns another shade of white. He closes his book, then, inserting his favorite bookmark, Opens the door to the library. Replacing the book in its rightful spot, he looks at the hour glass And giggling like a little boy of 6, he turns the glass Watching white sand spill to the other empty world Suffocating flames of life. Time passes, and the light behind the door fades And all that's left is a leather couch, and some books That never meant a thing to the world. "All he ever wanted was a little time alone, All he ever wanted was a little time to dream All he ever wanted was to kick up dust and sand All in a world that time passed by in screams." + + + + + I wanted to try something new...rhyming only goes so far. -Leah Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I love how you write Leah...the imagery you use and your power to somehow draw these amazing pictures in my head with your words is outstanding..your very talented to say the least yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I really liked it=) I could actually visualize everything you wrote..I look forward to reading more ![]() Kristen |
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Zukene_Chic Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 152Cali |
..wow. I liked this one a lot. The hour glass was good. |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
ok.. im wonderin why something from leah only has 3 posts so far. WHATS WRONG WITH YOU PEOPLE!? anyways.. ive always loved how you're able to bring the images of your story to my mind leah. here is just another example of your fantastic imagery. i loved the detailing you used in this.. as well as the last italiced bit. to me, this took a twist at the end and showed a deeper meaning. i like how youre able to surprise and keep my interest in your work. great piece, as usual leah. tiff ![]() “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Skyfire![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Leah, I love it!!! I just... It's going in my library! Donate to Rhonda's Crossing the Atlantic Fund!!! |
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Poet Unknown Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 140Missouri |
gotta agree...it was great Do as you please....strike forth down upon your knees...Darkness Falls on Those Without Souls |
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gymnast Member
since 2001-11-18
Posts 80Scotland. |
LOVED this poem! Great work! I can see in my mind my own images of what you write! Keep up the good work! This is great! ![]() ![]() |
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PoetryIsLife![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Leah-chic, wonderfully done. ![]() ![]() ![]() Sincerely, Titus "Outside of a dog, a book is man's best friend. And inside of a dog, it's too dark to read." |
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