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xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

0 posted 2002-01-25 10:01 AM

When it comes down,
To whats right and whats wrong.
How do you decide,
What you need to move on?
When it comes down,
To sacrifice or gain,
Do you do whats best for you,
Or do you give yourself a better name?
Purified or polluted,
Laced or pure.
Which is more enticing,
What would feed the cure?

Hey guys- This just came to me one day..i think you can look at it in a few different lights...hope you like it..

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

DancinQueen

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since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

1 posted 2002-01-25 12:23 PM

hey girlie

i liked this...kinda left me speechless. im not really sure what to say..and i dont want to give you one of those fake replies like "cool poem". but i did like it

keep 'em coming!

XoXo-Kiley

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

2 posted 2002-01-25 01:09 PM

interesting word choice, i really liked the way this piece flows. i think i'll have to come back and look at this again, it deserves some contemplation

keep posting your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

3 posted 2002-01-25 06:50 PM

LOL @ Kiley... I like it. I just... like it!

Find me a pidgeon that can solve my problems, and I'll find you a cat that can eat that pidgeon

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

4 posted 2002-01-25 07:48 PM

Thanks for your replies guys!

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

Greeneyes617
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since 2000-11-22

Posts 329
Arkansas

5 posted 2002-01-25 09:33 PM

When it comes down,
To whats right and whats wrong.
How do you decide,

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Love the flow, and word choice. To me, you did a great job of showing how hard it is to make choices now days. No one wants to screw up. Many times, we look into the past, wish we could go back, and do it over with the knowledge we have. Unfortunately, we can't do this... Well enough with my rambling. I enjoyed this very much. Thanks for posting it.

TigerZ
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since 2002-01-02

Posts 83
Ontario, Canada

6 posted 2002-01-25 10:32 PM

very interesting and makes you think...i liked it =) thx for posting

A life without love…is no life at all.

chasing rain
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since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

7 posted 2002-01-25 11:43 PM

A good poem to ponder over...short, but thoughtful and reflective. ^_^ The ryhme scheme was nice, and the flow wasn't too bad. A really well done poem! ^^;

-Leah

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

Ceinwyn
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Posts 2175
VA

8 posted 2002-01-26 12:40 PM

Here I am..sorry I haven't been replying to anyone lately..I read this and *sigh* you're making me ponder even more right now..it's weird..urgh..n/m..I simply adored it..=)

Kristen

[This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (01-26-2002 12:40 PM).]

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

9 posted 2002-01-27 09:55 PM

Very nicely done! I loved the rhyme and meter to this piece. The flow worked out perfectly. Very hard questions you're asking with this... ones I could never find the answer to. But if you do, be sure to email me...
Job very well done. I'm impressed!

--Marie

I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone.

TopGunLauren
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since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

10 posted 2002-01-27 10:22 PM

There is no right or wrong sometimes, because what you feel is right isn't always what other's feel is right.Or sometimes when you choose what is right it turns out being wrong.But anyway this poem really makes you think and I love it.
Lauren

"I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind

"You've got to get yourself together you got stuck in a moment and y

punkrockerrobin

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since 2001-05-15

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Sparks, NV

11 posted 2002-01-28 02:55 AM

great job! i enjoyed this one! tks for sharing.
robin

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china doll
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since 2002-01-20

Posts 22

12 posted 2002-01-28 02:04 PM

So true!I know what you mean.These days it's hard to do what's right, because who is to say what is right for you? Society's moral standards are diminishing, because people are beginning to follow their heart. Excellent piece...You brought up an important value.

xShUgArHiGhx

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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

13 posted 2002-01-29 12:04 PM

Thanks everyone for replying

BoOsH bOoSh nApoLE

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