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Crooked Halos V - A Victim of a Harmless Crime
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Crooked Halos V - A Victim of a Harmless Crime |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Watching the clock keep time, Helpless arms hugged ‘round herself, A victim of a harmless crime. A lone hand lifts to brush back hair That’s fallen to her face, Her distant eyes seeing none But the mem’ries she can’t erase. A quilt wrapped round her fragile form, The blouse beneath is torn, A tiny cut shows on her neck, Where a pendant once was worn. A little smudge marrs her cheek Where her face pressed to the dirt, Tiny twigs and smaller leaves Cling to her shredded skirt. Used, abused, now insecure, A bruise upon her arm, Such a bruise would not be there, If only she’d seen past his charm. "If life is so significant, then why do we die?" [This message has been edited by Kosetsu (01-23-2002 10:45 PM).] |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Ouch.. The flow in your work is great.. The messages so powerful that you can't help but read over and over.. Great work! Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
AIEEE!!! More sadness.  Evil men. Again, this was written beautifully with such impact. Scary thing is, it happens every day in the world... Adam, some really nice work! I love this series so far! (I like the name of it too, hehe. Crooked Halos...*thinks*) Keep it up! -Leah Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Omg wow this was amazing..it had such an impact and power...just wow... yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
How do you do this to me!? it's eerie once again..all your words seemed to cling themselves to my soul..I can't cry..I won't cry..I've never been so touched in my life..honestly... Kris |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
*tear* |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This hit hard... very hard. I love this series. It's so heart-wrenching, but very true. --Marie I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
what they said!!!!!.......i hate you more and more adamz dear...  eyes...........feeel...D |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
I love your work and the issues it deals with. You are a great poet, and intuned to pain that people endure for no reason at all. Keep up the series LCBS I was drowning in my own tears, until you threw me a life preserver |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
This occurance is far too common these days. What the hell is wrong with our world now? *grumbles a bit more* Anyway, it read through well and the imagery is simple but still in your face. Nicely done. Be proud. ~AF~ If this is all the world has to offer, I want a refund on my life. |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Hmmm...you cease to amaze me with the "Crooked Halos" series! "Snake, always remember that your mind if your most dangerous weapon. If things get too complicated---simplify your thoughts! |
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