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zarina
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since 2001-05-19

Posts 180

0 posted 2002-01-23 03:59 AM

No mother – No father
Only myself, and my hands are burning
I can’t see, I’ve closed my eyes
Wonder if they’re still there
This land – I do not know
Can no longer read the signs
The birds
Shallow dreams
Dim shadows
All what’s left
My tears in the northern wind

So I want to be nowhere
So I wish I were gone
So my mind may have fallen
Invisible I may be
Time is shining through me
He had no right
And my memories pains me
He’s not here of course
It’s better this way

Want to stay here forever
Floating in the northern wind
I wished for nothing
Wanted sleep
Want to lose life
Yet stay
Don’t know how to manage
Sleepwalker
I may be
Sleepwalker
Don’t
Don’t wait for me

No longer crawling
Just walking
AWAY
Far away
Fading away
I’m out of reach
And this is like
Heaven to me
The Great Nothingness
Ahead of me

----- I wrote this in a class, really. When I was all tired and messed up, heh, so I just wrote without thinking.. And then I found it and edited it a bit.. and well, I'm actually quite pleased with it (which is unbelivable, because I always hate my poems..) -----

I'm always myslef. Isn't that enough for you?

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

1 posted 2002-01-23 06:13 PM

Time is shining through me"

don't hate your poems, never hate anything that is part of you.;
This line is sterling. Keep writing, there's something special there.

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2002-01-26 11:53 PM

This was a really good poem zarina...i always find it interesting to see what comes out of boredom in the middle of class...

I liked it a lot and i thought it wads pretty interesting, not usual for what i am use to seeing from you but i did enjoy it a lot

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2002-01-31 10:02 AM

You shouldn't hate your poetry. From the work I've read, you seem to be very talented. What I love about your work is how you always pour all of yourself into it. This piece is very powerful, and lots of bitter. If you really feel this way, I hope you're talking to someone about it. Holding feelings like those in can be dangerous.

Very well done. I certainly enjoyed this.

--Marie

I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone.

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