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BrokenAngel
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0 posted 2002-01-20 06:03 PM


Devotion
The feeling you threw away
Devotion
The feeling you left behind
Devotion
You had everything
Devotion
Why did you leave me?
Devotion
I would do anything for you
Devotion
What does she have that is so better than me?
Devotion
I was your Angel and you my Wolf
Devotion
You threw it away with my heart
For nothing

---Night Angel

[This message has been edited by BrokenAngel (01-20-2002 11:07 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-01-20 09:37 PM


I really like the style you wrote this and "Silence".  Two very similar poems, but very different messages.
Wonderful work.  These are very hard questions, and I wish you the best of luck in discovering the answers.
Well done

--Marie

I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone.

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2 posted 2002-01-20 11:54 PM


Powerful piece...im really becoming attached to this format of urs...keep up the great work!

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

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3 posted 2002-01-23 10:26 AM


For such devotion, that person must be blind to throw everything away.

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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