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Teen Poetry #5

Devotion

BrokenAngel
Member

since 2002-01-06

Posts 141
Puryear, TN, USA

0 posted 2002-01-20 06:03 PM

Devotion
The feeling you threw away
Devotion
The feeling you left behind
Devotion
You had everything
Devotion
Why did you leave me?
Devotion
I would do anything for you
Devotion
What does she have that is so better than me?
Devotion
I was your Angel and you my Wolf
Devotion
You threw it away with my heart
For nothing

---Night Angel

[This message has been edited by BrokenAngel (01-20-2002 11:07 PM).]

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

1 posted 2002-01-20 09:37 PM

I really like the style you wrote this and "Silence". Two very similar poems, but very different messages.
Wonderful work. These are very hard questions, and I wish you the best of luck in discovering the answers.
Well done

--Marie

I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2002-01-20 11:54 PM

Powerful piece...im really becoming attached to this format of urs...keep up the great work!

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

Mon Cherie

Senior Member

since 2001-10-31

Posts 922
Land of Never-ending Summers

3 posted 2002-01-23 10:26 AM

For such devotion, that person must be blind to throw everything away.

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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