Teen Poetry #5 |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA ![]() |
Want to know What runs through my head Each time my heart plays dead Once I am face to face with you I'm even quite sure That you are curious To why I keep on running away And why I continually control you Like a puppet on a string But that's not what I intended My heart turns out to be pretending I guess I'm just lonely Looking for something familiar And I know that's wrong I can't hide behind the constant pain And constantly cry out your name Each time I fall down off of Love's Bike I just guess next time I won't reach out for a bandaide from you I apologize time and time again But I know that doesn't change The pain I put you through I just always find out Just as I'm close to the edge And when it's my heart that tells my head That my love for you Has been long dead So I guess I am using you I've been honest with you Telling you my feelings Once I even cried out between sobs That I'm afraid I'm using you But I think you were avoiding the truth Thinking that I was just confused And that I would never let my heart be subjected to that sort of abuse But it's true Oh my God it's true I'm sorry, I've done this to you I'm sorry, I always run away from affection And always assume That this too was going to end up To be just like the rest And that you just intended to hurt me But that still gives me no right To turn my pain upon you... |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was beautifully written and it had a lot of feeling and emotion in it..i enjoyed it a lot...amazing work yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows |
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Yezea, your Angel Junior Member
since 2001-06-08
Posts 11Canada |
Nice Poem Ceinwyn I can feel the feelings you put in this poem.. continu your good work |
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Mon Cherie![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Great work, Kristen. And I hope you'll find love soon, and this person will feel happy for you too. It may seem that you're using him, but I guess there are times when you need to turn to someone who knows you well, but you MIGHT find no one except him. _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
I really liked this poem Kristen. The words were chosen nicely, and the flow was good, though I did notice one or two places where it may have been better making two lines where you just had one. I think this is the first poem that I've read from you, and I must say that I liked this because it fits my past a bit. You can't go thinking that every guy is going to hurt you though...well, you can, but you'll never be happy if you do. Each new person has a clean slate. You won't know if they're gonna be any different until you find out. More often than not, it'll seem like they're just another jackass, but soon you'll find one of the good guys. -Adam "I like pigs. Dogs look up at us. Cats look down on us. Pigs treat us as equals." - Winston Churchill |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
And I know that's wrong I can't hide behind the constant pain That's the way to think... this poem is very heavy... it's obvious you put a lot of yourself into it. But I think a good deal of thinking rationally is in need... think with your head, not your heart. Your head will get you farther ![]() Hang in there ![]() *hugs* Enjoyed it... and looking forward to more. ![]() --Marie I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no should ever feel this alone. |
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