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Lights Out in Vegas |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
I guess it’s not a good time for me to ask for a little hug, For you right now that might be asking for way too much I wonder to myself if the walls hate the yelling as much as I do, Too afraid to say the things that we all know we should But how could you know the consequences of mistakes that you didn’t know you made For you it’s all too simple too black and white, and too plain – Your heart’s voice is drowned out in your anger, begging for the moment when someone understands Maybe then we can all cry, When there’s nothing else to say... or scream.. But until then We trip over endless fears and insecurities It’s times like this that my room really does feel so small... myself... so small The only thing that I fear is to die quietly. Read between the lines. jaimespoetry.blogspot.com [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (01-07-2002 07:42 PM).] |
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PoetryIsLife 
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Hey There.  Enjoyed it, yes indeedy. But, then again, I've told you that. Just wanted to let all of pip know that.  Sincerely, Titus The One, The Only... The Titus. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This made me cry..i dunno if the timing for this poem could be n e more perfect...i'm sitting here listening to Mirror Mirror by M2M and im jus balling because your poem depicts my life exactlty right at this moment in time..i love it ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Awww. *hugs you* I don't know if I should be sorry or happy to have posted this. Sorry because it hurts or happy because you were able to see that someone feels the same way as you and you're not alone. Either way, I'm glad it touched you. *hugs you again* Just for the hell of it. Thank you both so much. Titus, you rule. The only thing that I fear is to die quietly. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
"We trip over endless fears and insecurities It’s times like this that my room really does feel so small... myself... so small" ..ME everynight before I sleep when I DO sleep. I REALLY liked this, Jamie. Enjoy...as always. ^_^ "Dont piss me off. Im runing out of places to hide the bodies." [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (02-06-2002 02:15 AM).] |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I loved your ending I see someone quoted it already just be strong girl thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
This is a great poem. Dawn |
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-Queth- Junior Member
since 2002-02-10
Posts 35Canada |
I can see where your screen name comes into play. Your piece was hauntingly enchanting, yet somewhat bitter. You bring up some good points, such as {But how could you know the consequences of mistakes that you didn’t know you made}- which demonstrates how naïve people can be when it comes to finding our own faults and responsibilities. We try too hard to be perfect in an imperfect world. {Maybe then we can all cry, When there’s nothing else to say... or scream..}- It seems that today, we're always yelling at each other, and bitterness and sadness seem to rule our everyday lives. You brought reality into your poem quite well. -smile- Your ending was penetrating. Very effectively done! Thank you for sharing! Q.u.e.t.h. Everything in between... |
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