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Dark Enchantress
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0 posted 2002-01-07 07:41 PM


I guess it’s not
a good time for me to ask
for a little hug,
For you right now
that might be asking
for way too much
I wonder to myself
if the walls hate the yelling
as much as I do,
Too afraid to say the things
that we all know we should
But how could you know
the consequences of
mistakes that you
didn’t know you made
For you it’s all too simple
too black and white,
and too plain –
Your heart’s voice is
drowned out in your anger,
begging for the moment
when someone understands
Maybe then we can all cry,
When there’s nothing else
to say... or scream..
But until then
We trip over endless
fears and insecurities
It’s times like this
that my room really does
feel so small...
              

              myself...

        

      so small



The only thing that I fear is to die quietly.

Read between the lines.

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[This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (01-07-2002 07:42 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-01-07 07:53 PM


Hey There. Enjoyed it, yes indeedy. But, then again, I've told you that. Just wanted to let all of pip know that.

Sincerely,
Titus

The One, The Only... The Titus.

    

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2 posted 2002-01-07 08:48 PM


This made me cry..i dunno if the timing for this poem could be n e more perfect...i'm sitting here listening to Mirror Mirror by M2M and im jus balling because your poem depicts my life exactlty right at this moment in time..i love it

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

Dark Enchantress
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3 posted 2002-01-07 10:34 PM


Awww. *hugs you* I don't know if I should be sorry or happy to have posted this. Sorry because it hurts or happy because you were able to see that someone feels the same way as you and you're not alone. Either way, I'm glad it touched you. *hugs you again* Just for the hell of it.

Thank you both so much. Titus, you rule.

The only thing that I fear is to die quietly.

Read between the lines.

jaimespoetry.blogspot.com

anonymous albert ?
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4 posted 2002-02-06 01:23 AM


"We trip over endless
fears and insecurities
It’s times like this
that my room really does
feel so small...
              

              myself...

        

      so small"

..ME everynight before I sleep when I DO sleep.

I REALLY liked this, Jamie. Enjoy...as always. ^_^

"Dont piss me off. Im runing out of places to hide the bodies."


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5 posted 2002-02-11 04:26 PM


I loved your ending
I see someone quoted it already
just be strong girl
thanks for sharing

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


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6 posted 2002-02-11 06:54 PM


This is a great poem.

                        Dawn

-Queth-
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7 posted 2002-02-11 08:43 PM


-Dark Enchantress-

I can see where your screen name comes into play. Your piece was hauntingly enchanting, yet somewhat bitter. You bring up some good points, such as
{But how could you know
the consequences of
mistakes that you
didn’t know you made}- which demonstrates how naïve people can be when it comes to finding our own faults and responsibilities. We try too hard to be perfect in an imperfect world.

{Maybe then we can all cry,
When there’s nothing else
to say... or scream..}- It seems that today, we're always yelling at each other, and bitterness and sadness seem to rule our everyday lives. You brought reality into your poem quite well. -smile-

Your ending was penetrating. Very effectively done! Thank you for sharing!


Q.u.e.t.h.

Everything in between...
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