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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Wrapped in beauty she sits half-consciously Looking off into space as if she were bored So aware and alive yet innocent and naive, as it is evident in her eyes Lips I'd love to kiss for surely they know what love really is Such a ready girl in an unstable world Maybe someday we'll be safe somewhere other than inside ******************************* This is a little "prettier" than anything I normally write/post, but I thought it said something in it that was worth saying. Sorry if you don't see it. I guess then it's not as obvious as I thought. haha Back to the drawing boards, right? I just wrote it during 4th period when I was watching her. So no she wasn't bored with me. That's not possible. I'm a portable party. Hmm.. are you sufficating on the sarcasm yet?  Thanks you guys. You're great.  The only thing that I fear is to die quietly. Read between the lines. jaimespoetry.blogspot.com [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (01-06-2002 01:18 AM).] |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
You know what I just realized? "I'm a portable party" up there... if read quickly or uncarefully looks an awfull lot like "I'm a portable potty." *blinks* This is what I get for being somewhat social. *goes back to her corner* The only thing that I fear is to die quietly. |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
I think I get the hidden message... and it's a very simple one that very few people remember to do. (LOL If I'm not makin' any sense, just work with me I'm on cough medicine) Great read on how you see people! "You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
LMAO!!!!! Portable potty... omgosh... that got me rollin... (not to mention, I looked kinda dumb laughing at the computer screen, but the people around here are used to that.. no comments on that one -  )Anywho, this is a very well-written poem... a lot less darker than I'm used to seeing from you. Actually, after I read this, I had to check the author again. You did very well at writing in a more romantic aura. I cenrtainly enjoyed this. The images also rocked, by the way. Well done I enjoyed this muchos... look forward to more..--Marie Portable potty... *chuckles* "It was a long December, but there's reason to believe that maybe this year will be better than the last." (Counting Crows) |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
I'm Sorry I'm a simple man I just don't see it. But the poem was good though. "It is better to have loved and lost than to have never have loved at all" ...but the pain of both is equally unbearable... |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I see the hidden message Portable potty..hahah that was funny!!! Nice poem... ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
*stands up and claps* Looks around room innocently... Just wanted to say, as usual, I enjoyed your work. Try 'pretty' more often. Wait, what am I saying? Try anything more often. LoL. Btw, send me those two soon, eh? LoL.  Sincerely, Titus The One, The Only... The Titus. |
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