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Teen Poetry #5

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inspiredpoetwriter
Member

since 2002-01-05

Posts 104
Minnesota

0 posted 2002-01-05 12:53 PM

Please let me out
Please I want to be free
Somebody take me
Out of this black hole
I want to run away
As fast as I can
From my fears,my pain
The sorrow keeps swallowing
My up.

My tears are shed in
The black of the night
While I lay in bed
Tommorrow is here still
I'm not free from the
Black hole that soon
Will b eto deep to get out.

I reach for the heavens
Looking for answers
To find there arent
Any there deep in my heart
My body my soul I
Know someone will
Get me out just depends on
When and why.

LoneWolf
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

1 posted 2002-01-05 06:24 PM

This was good. nice job here.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

Tamma

Senior Member

since 2000-01-17

Posts 794
In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV

2 posted 2002-01-05 06:47 PM

good poem...hope to see more of your work

If I held a star everytyme
he made me smile,I'd have the
evening sky in my palm, if
one was removed for every tear
he caused, I'd be emptyhanded.

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

3 posted 2002-01-05 06:56 PM

Wonderful start to pip. It was an enjoyable read. While I might change some of the verses to where they flowed a bit more, I enjoyed it none the less. It seems you have a talent; keep 'em coming new friend!

Sincerely,
Titus

The One, The Only... The Titus.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

4 posted 2002-01-05 07:08 PM

Beautiful emotion in this piece..u really let ur feelings out. I know how you feel..its a bad feeling...::hugs:: loved this piece!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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