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LCsftball16
Junior Member

since 2001-05-17

Posts 39

0 posted 2002-01-03 08:48 PM

hey guys! its been soooo long since i posted here! wow... yeah for lack of a better title it's called "into the sky"... kinda blah. i have nooo idea where i was going with this... n e wayz~enjoy
I looked into the sky
To see into its soul
I saw the brightness of the sun
And it's everlasting gold

I looked into the sky
To see what I could see
I never thought it could happen
To behold a paragon of me

I looked into the sky
To decipher stories untold
To tell it I'm not afraid that
My future is for it to hold

I looked into the sky
And caught a glimpse of the sun
A full array of colors evoked it
And evening has begun

I looked into the sky
The stars about to fall
Each second is worth being
Enraptured in it all

I looked into the sky
Once more before I die
Into immortal stars above
Into the darkened sky

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2002-01-03 10:35 PM

I think the title fits just fine

I enjoyed this

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

2 posted 2002-01-04 12:18 PM

Welcome back, it's wonderful to see you posting again.

I loved this, the rhyme scheme was very well done, and the message was clearly expressed. I liked the content, very optimistic sounding. Nice work!

I look forward to reading more

--Marie

"It was a long December, but there's reason to believe that maybe this year will be better than the last." (Counting Crows)

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2002-01-04 11:43 AM

An amazing piece and its great to see you back again! Hope to see more

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

gymnast
Member

since 2001-11-18

Posts 80
Scotland.

4 posted 2002-01-04 06:51 PM

This poem is BRILL! It reminds me of looking at clouds and trying to make pictures from them-thanks for rekindling my memories!Keep Up the good work!!!

HiddenSparklez
Member

since 2000-12-29

Posts 190
British Columbia, Canada

5 posted 2002-01-04 09:08 PM

"I looked into the sky
To see into its soul
I saw the brightness of the sun
And it's everlasting gold" <- right off the back it was very honest and interesting. And I think it's worth taking note that you used the word everlasting... because we all know the sky never ends and is everlasting. Isn't it cool how we talk about one thing and use words to describe it without even knowing it? Great job, I enjoyed this a lot.

"You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

6 posted 2002-01-04 09:36 PM

Great write! I love it!

You know you're Canadian when if something's broken, the first thing you ask is if it can be fixed with WD-40 or Duct Tape

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