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the love that we don't share
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the love that we don't share |
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~*brittt*~ Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 76East Haddam, CT |
hey guys...i havent posted in a really long time but its not often i write a poem i like and i think i like this one so im gonna let u all read it and tell me what you think ok? Late at night I wonder What it would be like To be held in your arms And in your thoughts at night. What it would be like to kiss you And look into your eyes To hold your hand and smile Knowing you are mine. A couple times I almost told you But realized you wouldnt care So i cried another tear, For the love that we don't share. [This message has been edited by ~*brittt*~ (01-03-2002 10:01 AM).] |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
Oh, WoW! I really liked this one, I can really relate to it. Whenever I'm stuck in this situation, I alway remember what my good ol' friend Clint always used to tell me..."You always want what you can't have, the more you know you can't have it, the more you want it." - Just some words of wisdom, from someone whose been there before. ~Tamma If I held a star everytyme |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Oh, I really liked this, Britt. I think that many can relate to you on this. I loved the ending, the poem came to a complete close, but the last stanza almost brought tears to my eyes. Very nice work. And welcome back! I look forward to reading more from you.  --Marie "It was a long December, but there's reason to believe that maybe this year will be better than the last." (Counting Crows) |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
i liked this one. good job here It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Aww hun im sorry..this is very sad. I hope that your able to experience all these wonderful things you talk of in your poem one day..::hugs:: ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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~*brittt*~ Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 76East Haddam, CT |
thanks guys! i thought since i hadnt posted in a while no one would really read anything new i wrote but thatnks so much. im really glad u liked it. im in one of those icky love situations so youll be hearing a lot more like this! ~britt~ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
we're in the same boat...sucks. im sorry...wish i knew whatto say to make us feel better. oh well! I find it helps to go on vacation and get yourself around alot of hot guys that kiss your butt  Newho...take careXXOO-Kiley **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
That is like the worst feeling in the world...To want someone and know that you cant have them...One day you will meet someone better then the one you are talking about and think what was going through your mind!!! Nice poem!!! If you want something very badly, set it free. If it comes back to you, its yours forever, if it doesnt, it was never yours to begin with" |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
just tell him. i mean, what have ya got to lose. great write too. good rhythm and balance. it just flows. *simplify* |
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