Your weapon wasn't so sharp.

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Kicking Kim
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since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

0 posted 2001-07-07 12:00 PM

Your thoughts were your predomenant weapon,
ignorantly leading YOU
to see a false image of situations.
The brain of your soul,
better than a consience
nothing comparing.
After all
it was what you wanted to hear.
The night became day
creeping thoughts
taking over this unknown space,
which YOU called your mind.
Wasted ideas,
sinking into this whirlpool of thoughts.
When the smoke lifted,
it was clear to see
that the weapon you held so close to your mind
was turning on YOU, rather than ME.

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

1 posted 2001-07-07 01:41 PM

Great work I really enjoyed the read, I hope to see more of your work around here

Zu

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-07-07 01:54 PM

wow!...very wel written...the "meaning" of thsi one...made my thoughts flowing

...i loved it!

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 07-07-2001).]

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

3 posted 2001-07-07 10:08 PM

OOooo Kim I really liked this one.
The whole idea/meaning of it kicked butt.
Great job on this one!

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

4 posted 2001-07-08 12:51 PM

amazing work Kim. keep it up

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-07-09 12:41 PM

I enjoyed this one a lot here.
Well done!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Maynard
Junior Member

since 2001-06-29

Posts 12
IL

6 posted 2001-07-09 01:17 AM

another great write, i really enjoyed it

"I have nothing to tell you or sell you for the moment... but thank you for asking."

Jose Marti
Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 374
washing DC

7 posted 2001-07-09 08:44 AM

Nice poem
I enjoyed it a lot
it gets its message across
very clearly

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

8 posted 2001-07-09 03:48 PM

Nice poem. I enjoyed it. Thanks for the great read!

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

9 posted 2001-07-15 07:42 PM

very well written. I'm am in awe right now. You did great. Thanks for the wonderful read. keep it up

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