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Leah's lovey-dovey-poem-that-is-never-to-be-spoken-of-again-to-her-face. |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
A river that constantly flows to the sea Is marked by your love, to never run dry The map that bestowed the warmth of your lips Was given to me, to search in the sky. I haven't the desire to wait for the clouds I wish only to seek the stars every night That shine in the sky, reminds me of you A fire that burns of a heavenly light. The wind laughs a tune that tickles my face And plays with my hair, your hands, are they not? The moon blushes red by the sun's morning rays That reached out to touch the heart that was caught. + + + + + I finally fell into that lovey dovey poem trap. x_X I really didn't enjoy writing this one. It's a little embarrassing for me to share this, since I never really share much love poetry. I really liked the second stanza. That was fun. But really, I don't think I'm one for writing love poetry...ne? ^_^;;; Never again. Hehe. ^_^ ++ Leah ++ Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... [This message has been edited by chasing rain (12-27-2001 07:30 PM).] |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Awww Leah  A lovely love poem. While I don't care much for love itself, you've written some very beautiful sentiments here. Nice imagery. I particulary like the line about the wind tickling your face. Quite creative of you but that is to be expected.  Thanks for sharing. *hits love with a rubber bat*  ~AF~ If this is all the world has to offer, I want a refund on my life. |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Well, I think it's a very open-ended poem you have here. It doesn't have to be about love you know. I mean U2 writes stuff like this and it's all about religion and other things. So don't take yourself so seriously, if it's good it must be worth it, lovey dovey or not. I can say I enjoyed this and am not ashamed. YOu shouldn't be More More MORE!!  oh well good poem"and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
AwWwWw LeAh i LikEd iT!!!! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Aw! This was good! You're good at any genre of poetry that you try! No doubt about it, Sweet Pea...you've got a nack for ANY type of poetry! This was adorable! Lol, you should do more of it!!! Surrender now, or prepare to fight! |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
i liked this poem a lot! great work! robin repeat after me: punk is the best music ever created! |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
I personally liked this one alot...a job well done. The first stanza was actually my fav. Hope to see more from you:-) ~Nikki~ Smile!! You never know who may be falling in love with it... |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Never have you ceased to amaze me Love poems are grat Leah Your's is awesome keep it up là où est mon amour? |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
But you did the love poem thing so well! The stanza and flow is great. Awesome poem. (as lovey dovey as it may be) Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
"The moon blushes red by the sun's morning rays That reached out to touch the heart that was caught." This was a beautiful disply of the talent you possess, Lee-uh! The images you've portrayed throughout this piece are breathtaking. The rhyme scheme is very well done (which, doesn't surprise me - that seems to be something that's always flawless in your poems). This is one of those pieces where rhyme isn't needed... the meter serves for the beat that it needs, and it's beautiful. Wonderfully done. I enjoyed this, as I do every one of your poems. (I'm trying my best not to nag you for having a crush ). I'll just say you should write love poems more often! Beautiful write. --Marie "It's been a long December, and there's reason to believe that maybe this year will be better than the last." (Counting Crows) |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
I don't have a crush, but thanks for reading! ^_^ Hee. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
first of all your title, i loved it , it made me smile, this was just an amzing poem Leah. keep on writing. dont be embarassed... Regina |
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