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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking 
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Snow A million Angels f l o a t i n g d o w n to Earth Smothering all in a pure glow Good will amongst MAN Poets romanticise While he reaps the angel tide And salts the healing wounds His bloody thirst quenched in the Watery graves Of delicate angels. Well it's another poem in the same week, meaning that yes I am writing again. Thank you to someone who has really believed in my work and who has really pushed me into writing something (You know who you are  ). This poem is sort of an experiment for me so tell me what you honestly think... can you follow that "floating down" bit? Anyway thanks for reading this Andrew (Zu) If I gave you $1 for every reply you might be rich, but looking at your post count I think not. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
Andrew!  awesome piece...i found it differ from your previous, obvisuoly eh? the experiment turned out wonderful...think you should do some more...first i was like staring at the "floating" part the...then i finally got it. woohoo! lol...the poem is quite deep. i liked how you wrote it, great job and Thanks for sharing. Hey...#25437 |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
so much meaning in so few lines, I love that kind of stuff. Short and deep it makes you think. I like that thanks for posting! Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
hey Zu, messin with my poor eyes with that floating trip LOL I like this very much! well done, and Merry Christmas! |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was a wonderful piece zu!! Thanks for sharing! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
Ooh! Ooh! *raises her hand..and then sits back down* what did i tell you? see?..freeverse is easy...and when you know how to write it you can come up with wunnerful poems like this one right here! i love this one as much as i did the other one. i liked the floating down bit too- it added to the image of soft snow falling...very cute zu. i love your darker more somber work...and this one does have a somber but beautiful feel to it- kinda like sitting in a magnificent cathedral. loved it lots andy- looking forward to reading more- you know you have it in you. Cut your hair. short. now. and cry. cuz no one cares. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Well thank you all for the replies, I wasn't sure about the "floating" thing but it is reassuring that you got it. This kind of writing is an experiment as mostly I can't help but ryhme. Thanks for all your replies and big thanx to Cherish for all her encouragement, support, nagging and the belief that I could write. Andrew. If I gave you $1 for every reply you might be rich, but looking at your post count I think not. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow... this is definitely what I've been missing! This is absolutely beautiful. Very well written. I loved the use of HTML, that seems to just make the poem. Very well done! You have so much talent, Zu... you're one of the writers in the forum I really look up to! Very nicely done. I enjoyed this muchos! Post more soon... --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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