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PoetryIsLife

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since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

0 posted 2001-11-19 08:42 PM

I’ll be here,
when you return,
and when you go.
Emotions still churn,
an constant flow.

I’ll be here,
with arms wide open,
ready with a welcome back kiss.
Always I’ll be hoping,
we’ll return to the bliss.

I’ll be here,
no matter what you ruined,
despite what how you crushed.
My heart won’t be hushed,
the tears are still rushed.

I’ll be here,
to say goodbye!
Never again will we have that high.
To your face, good riddance I’ll say.
But I wont make you pay.

I’ll be here.
I don’t know why.
You’ve made me cry,
but never again will I accept,
your pitiful regret.

I’ll be here,
to say move on,
what you did was wrong.
You, me - we need to let go,
or we’ll torment our souls.

I’ll be here,
moving on,
not holding on.

I’ll be here.
But not for you.

Daniel Redding
11/15/01

K. Rebel
Junior Member

since 2001-10-21

Posts 40
San Juan, PR

1 posted 2001-11-19 09:59 PM

A great concept to go witha gret poem.

SunShine913

Member

since 2001-08-19

Posts 211
Italy but from NC

2 posted 2001-11-19 10:14 PM

I really liked this please keep it up so i have more to look foward to reading.. altho what i can say is this isnt my fav or yours but i still like it

*!~!* Andrea *!~!*

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

3 posted 2001-11-19 10:40 PM

i liked the ending..i'll be here moving on, not holding on. liked that part

great job..keep it up

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

4 posted 2001-11-20 01:26 AM

Awww! So good, Titus, so good!

~Love Rhon for she is as good as Zu... Yeah, that sounds right...err all hail Zu and Rhon~
I love Titus

Lisa_bebe15
Member

since 2001-11-15

Posts 151
Florida

5 posted 2001-11-20 09:12 AM

Awww..I love that. I wish I could write like that..I just joined the other day..and I love your poems. I write poetry to show how I feel about my b/f Jeff..I call him Jeffy for short..well enough about me..I hope you keep writing as good as that poem..

"Water Over Matter"

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

6 posted 2001-11-20 04:33 PM

Thank you all for the compliments! Each poem has a personal place in my heart and mind. I don't truely no how they get written. They just do. Anyways, thanks for the notes. Looking forward to reading your work. Late.

Sincerely,
Titus

DawnG

Senior Member

since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

7 posted 2001-11-20 06:53 PM

I really liked this.

Dawn

punkrockerrobin

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since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

8 posted 2001-11-26 03:08 AM

dang titus you are better at this than me! i'm gonna have to get some tips from you hun!

titus is mine and mine only!!! *glares at rhonda*
I CAN DO ALL THINGS THROUGH CHRIST WHO STREGTHENS ME! PHILIPPIANS 4:13
love me for i am PUNK!

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

9 posted 2001-11-26 09:51 AM

I love how the poem slowly worked into you being stronger and stronger and then finally you stand up for yourself...

It was really very good

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

10 posted 2001-11-26 11:44 AM

Wow! Your skill is DEFINETLY improving! I'm amazed! ^_^

"Fighting was the only thing I was good at...but I at least I always fought for what I beleived in..."

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

11 posted 2001-11-26 02:44 PM

DawnG - Thank you

Robin - That's very sweet. I hope to never stop improving. I may write well at times, but I look up to everyone here.

Shugar - You got my poem perfectly, right to the point. I love it when what I'm saying is caught. Thanks! =)

Anriod - Dude... thanks =)

Sincerely,
Titus

Love me for Rhon loves me.

*FDNY*

never_a_princess
Member

since 2001-06-09

Posts 82
Show Me the Money

12 posted 2001-12-01 02:49 PM

Wow! This poem is really full of emotion! I liked it a lot! And I can so relate..*mumbles under breath* I love how you changed from "I'll be here, with arms wide open" to "I’ll be here, But not for you"
Great write.
__o0o_Anna_o0o__ *waves*

Friends r angels who lift u 2 ur feet when ur wings have trouble remembering how 2 fly.
Stumbling blox can b stepping stones if u allow them 2 b.

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

13 posted 2001-12-14 04:13 PM

Thanks

Titus

"...and don't you ever insult MY WIFE AGAIN!!!"
         -Dave

"Long Live New York!"
         -Me (Titus)

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

14 posted 2001-12-14 08:51 PM

i like this..i thought it was a bit repetitive towards the middle- but you finished it off pretty well. i guess that added more life to the poem. good jobbies danniti....looking forward to more

....but wanting a gold one

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

15 posted 2001-12-15 01:24 AM

Very nice poem. Don't know what else to say, getting tired...
Jon

"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur
"Sometimes it takes a painful loss to realize you are free"- Bouncing Souls

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

16 posted 2001-12-16 02:58 AM

Great work, Daniel. I particulary liked the way it ended. There's a lot of strength in it which is always good.

Hura for you.

Thanks for sharing.

~AF~

"I don't think we should have to face all of our fears in one life." - Kevin, <i>Seachange</i>

sweetlilangel
Junior Member

since 2001-12-05

Posts 26

17 posted 2001-12-16 09:04 AM

That was great. I really enjoyed reading it!!! I cant wait to read more so keep um comming~Cassi

Don't be sad because it's over smile because it happened!

deadeyes
Junior Member

since 2001-11-07

Posts 33

18 posted 2001-12-16 10:22 AM

I think this poem was good in terms of how you expressed your emotions quite well. Something I didn't like was that some verses sounded a bit cliche-ish if you ask me. I think it's a good elemental poem and I know you got the potential because i see it in the way you write. Lokking forward to read more. B

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

19 posted 2001-12-25 12:16 PM

Good for you!
*Uses your poetry as advice for herself...*
Loved the write!

"I'd rather die purposely alone than to have lived an accidental life of solitude."- Jesa "§ùgã®" Thompson

prov1717
Member

since 2001-12-26

Posts 74
NE

20 posted 2001-12-26 02:58 AM

what can i say that hasn't already been said? i like it...

les

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

21 posted 2001-12-26 12:55 PM

This is a poem I definitely needed to hear.

Very nice work, Daniel. I really loved the ending. I wasn't expecting that. It's a tough situation, but you seem to be handling it in a way that not many would
I enjoyed this piece, as always, and I look forward to reading more!

--Marie

If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway.

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