Teen Poetry #5 |
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Warm Your Hands |
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Jenabou Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA ![]() |
Here and now...is this all we'll ever be? My life is spinning downward. out of control And you know you mean everything to me I feel my heart shatter every second we're apart I know i should let go and i would let go if I could But your name,it's engraved in my heart and soul it longs for you.like it knows something I don't It screams out for you Every night The stars and the moon shine down on me and You walk through my heart as if orders from God wove the threads of our being together Your eyes are blind and your mouth will never smile until you realize all you need you'll find inside of me there is a fire burning for you So Ian, won't you come warm your hands? ~Jenna-Nicole Boutilier~ 12/22/01 The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
WOW! this had so much feeling in it i dont even know where to begin...amazing job and i think you expressed your feelings wonderfully in this!! I loved the last line..so romantic in a way but at the same time crying out for help...wonderful job!! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
This is outstanding, Jenna. Amazing actually. Well, there are quite a few words to describe it so we'll leave it at a couple of them. ![]() The staggered words worked well. It makes you slow down while reading it....at least for me anyway. ![]() Thanks for sharing this. I really enjoyed it. Please remember to reply to others work also. ~AF~ If this is all the world has to offer, I want a refund on my life. |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
Wow...so much emotion in this, don't know where to begin.. I love this format with the staggared words as well, it adds something to the poem. Extremely well written, thouroughly enjoyed. Don't Drink and Park! |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Hey I REALLY liked this one!! You've succeeded in putting your emotions on paper, and you did a great job of it!! This was GREAT!! ![]() ![]() *~Fighting for your love~* |
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Marshalzu![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Thank you for sharing this great piece of work, I really enjoyed the read and feel that a lot of your emotions have gone into this peice, keep on posting this great work ![]() Zu "No army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe" |
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Jenn Cirrincione![]() ![]()
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Wow. I loved this one. So cute in the way it was expressed. ~ inside of me there is a fire burning for you~ ahhh I know this well Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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