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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
Tears flow like rivers in the midst of the night you lie awaiting help for you can no longer fight it hurts when you breathe when you open your eyes does anyone see the tears or hear your fragile cries its hard when you feel like your not accepted like no matter what you do you'll be rejected when you press on never hearing the words I love you when you wish you knew someone was proud of you. How does it feel to cry in anothers arms feeling the pain but trying to escape the harm when your words fall short cause the pain is so real wishing that maybe just one person knew how you feel praying at night for God to take away the pain while replaying hurtful words that drive you insane I've been ther I've done it I know how it feels I know the sorrow and the joy that it steals just once I'd love for you to just plainly see that no matter what you'll be loved and accepted by me. we fall like the stars then rise like the sun..Repentence.Forgiveness.We are blame worthy hold us to our wrongs..but don't hold our wrongs against us |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
awwww, that is so cute. I love it...made me cry though. why'd you have to go and make me cry? heh, that's okay though, it's beautiful  If someone said, "Write a sentence about your life," I'd write "I want to go outside and play." |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Yeah this is a very tea provoking poem I like it though. Lauren "I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
Well, hmm...this poem really hit home...for some reason....Great Read...post more!! ~ Tamma If I held a star everytyme |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
awww I liked this alot! ....Handle with care... |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Wow. I liked the way it flipped in the end. I liked this very heartfelt. Great work.  Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
WOw....beautifully done...it had so much feeling in it...amazing job! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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prov1717 Member
since 2001-12-26
Posts 74NE |
great poem! keep it up! |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
jimmy where the heck have you been? grrr i was so worried bout you! email me at least and let me know you're ok. please! great poem hun! repeat after me: punk is the best music ever created! |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is definitely one of the best ones I've read from you. "its hard when you feel like your not accepted like no matter what you do you'll be rejected when you press on never hearing the words I love you when you wish you knew someone was proud of you." This portrayed some pretty heavy emotions. You expressed yourself incredibly well. I loved the way you opened the poem with a smilie. Very nice work! I can't wait to read more --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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