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fearing-laughter
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0 posted 2001-12-17 01:11 AM


read and tell me what you honestly think, thanks
-bergundy-

dark thoughts
guilty pleasure
i know i shouldn't think these words
but they make me feel better
whispered words
deceitful minds
i find comfort
in your lies
as my mind slowly fades away
seeking refuge from my pain
i become polluted
by your acid rain




maybe i'll catch fire, something nice to warm me. something pure to burn away the darkness, that hides inside my mind. -alkaline trio-

[This message has been edited by fearing-laughter (edited 12-17-2001).]

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dastard
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in tearing silence
1 posted 2001-12-17 01:46 AM


I liked it!  

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fearing-laughter
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2 posted 2001-12-20 12:53 PM


thanks dastard! =)
-bergundy-

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...in my boxers...
3 posted 2001-12-20 06:22 PM


Bergundy

Interesting! Short, but strong! Very strong, and vivid. Again, very cool

Sincerely,
Titus

Zukene_Chic
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Cali
4 posted 2001-12-20 10:05 PM


Very VERY good. I'm not quite sure why I fell that way, but I do...
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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs
5 posted 2001-12-21 01:54 PM


Maybe you shouldnt think those words but if they cant help but make you feel better than what r u gonna do ya kno?? WoNdErFuL pOeM... I can definately relate

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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6 posted 2001-12-31 10:06 AM


You did well

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


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7 posted 2002-01-03 11:31 AM


Wow!!

First of all, welcome back!  I haven't seen your posts in a while either.  It's great to have you back, so be sure to show yourself more!  

This is an awesome poem.  I loved the last line - that especially hit me hard.  The intensity of the poem makes is very powerful, dspite the length.  You did very well here.  I'm impressed!  I enjoyed this, as always.
Well done

--Marie

"It was a long December, and there's reason to believe that maybe this year will be better than the last." (Counting Crows)

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