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[Ice Box] Junior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 21Canada |
Exposure They played a game of hide and seek Through forest and through fields Darting In and out Into shades of green Or golden brown To hide within. Silence plays upon their ears As they wait for footsteps following Their heavy breathing In and out. Time has passed, and curious minds Take time to peek a little, seek a little Measuring exposure time. And turning 'round, their lovely eyes Meet yet again, never found, but rather Knowing one was there to catch them if ever one should fall In and out Of time. Slipping back into the frame The photo lays, untouched, unseen And time has passed since we played the game... In our minds. [Ice Box] NB: This is more than just a game...what do you see? Frost. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
ooooooh wow! MORE i say! sorry...i had to say that first  what do i see? i see two ppl- maybe old friends, maybe an aged couple, maybe even an adult looking back on a childhood friendship or love. i really love the way you wrote this. i loved the repetition and use of italics and everything! its awesome. i really enjoy your work ( i know ive only read one other poem of yours )im fast becoming a fan!keep writing and sharing! |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
*click*...forgot to add this  |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This to me seems to be looking into memories of the past. It may be wrong, but hey, that's how I saw it  I love the scene you created in this poem beautiful imagery thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
what cherrish said... just let me add on, you are amazing Ice. I'm glad you're a member here. Titus |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Really an amazing poem..got me thinking hard..very hard actually..not quite shur what else it is but a game..i'll have to get back to you... ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
i liked this poem a lot! great work! robin repeat after me: punk is the best music ever created! |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
 WOW! This is beautiful... what do I see? I see two people very much in love. I absolutely love the style you used here. The format works perfectly... wowsers. This is awesome. I'm adding this to my library. I would even venture to say this is the one of the best I've read at PIP. The HTML, and the centering of the poem made it work. Very nice work... I'm definitely looking forward to more. Nicely done. --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Cherish is rubbing off on me... I forgot to click the button... If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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