Teen Poetry #5 |
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What Will It Take |
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DancinQueen![]()
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA ![]() |
-=What Will It Take=- What will it take to make you turn around and see make you open up your eyes and fall in love with me If I only knew what I need to say to open up your eyes to me and take your breath away Just tell me what it is I need to do to capture your heart so you love me, too And if there are no words to change the way you feel give me a reason to hate you and maybe someday i will heal **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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since 2001-12-07
Posts 1 |
Really cool poem, but I must comment on the title. It's wonderful it's like my name :-P heh heh great job -=*=- |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
I really, really loved this poem. To be honest I'm not exactly sure why... it's just the way you worded it and your ending I guess. I just really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for posting!! Oh... and good luck. ![]() The only thing that I fear is to die quietly. |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Awsome poem I loved it but I love all your poems.You really do have a special talent and keep up the awsome work. Lauren "I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
hmmmm, this doesn't seem right I thought you both are together again what's going on now? I do like the structure of the poem though You have grown and adapted to a certain style of writing It's actually made you a much better poet I'm very impressed keep it up Buttons ![]() là où est mon amour? donde está mi amour? wo ist meine Liebe? [This message has been edited by acire (edited 12-07-2001).] |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
whoa...nicely protryed,Kiley. VERY heartfelt...ending ended it, wonderfully. Hey...#25437 |
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Jenn Cirrincione![]() ![]()
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
LOVING this. Great work Kiley. As always, I relate muchly. Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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JBaker515![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
It wont take much because you are an amazing person from head to toe, and you deserve the best. Your time will come, dont rush it, you have so much life to live. You know you are special and Mr. Right will come, and he will treat you like a queen. I promise you that. Loved the poem babe! SMILE! ![]() |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
~Kiley~ I love this one!!! It is something that I would like to give to someone. But you did a great job opening yourself up and getting to the point of what you wanted!! "If you should die before me, ask if you could bring a friend." |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia |
This was a great poem I really enjoyed reading it! Best of Luck with the guy... Love Jo * never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you* |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Oh deary ![]() Could relate to this piece like no other. I love it in a sad way, kiley. You always were a great writer and this only shows it. Thank you very much for posting this. I'm going to print it off and stick it on my wall to remind me to get over him somehow. *sighs* ~AF~ "When I eat I feel. It is better if I don't feel, I am too afraid." - Ellen West |
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branden726![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Hey, you havent heard from me in a while but if you at all have to make someone "turn around and see" that they love you then it wouldnt be love hun, if they look at you and say oh im in love with you then that might be love but not always. You see when u try to make someone love you....It doesnt work because then u start molding them to exactly what you want and well thats how i just lost my gf of 1 year 3 months not to long ago. Not good. I liked the poem tho made lots of since. All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare! |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Kiley, I liked this one alot!!! I haven't seen post in awhile, but I hope to see more!! Great work, and I hope that ur situation improves!! ![]() ![]() *~Fighting for your love~* |
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DancinQueen![]()
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
thanks for the info Brandon, but i know...but u can still dream **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Oh wow, this piece hit me hard! The last two lines were like a kick in the stomach. I think more people here can relate than you think. ![]() --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was an awesome poem kiley...love sucks sometimes...i agree with you..sometimes i wish the person i love could give me a reason to hate them so it would make it easier for me to get over them..but unfortunately im usually not that lucky but i hope you are if things dont work out for you!! nicely done ![]() ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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DancinQueen![]()
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
thanks everyone **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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corey14 Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 89Boston, Mass, U.S.A. |
omg thats the same way i am fealing and i can realy relate this is one of the very best poems i ever read keep up the work $~~~corey~~~$ live a little everyday and when its all over you will have lived a lot |
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crazymin83 Junior Member
since 2001-09-16
Posts 49Mass |
Hey I really liked your poem, it was nice. ![]() ![]() |
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