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lone_poet707 Member
since 2001-11-17
Posts 70black hole named Aylmer |
Why can't u leave me 2 my misery? Give 2 me some kind of reprieve fom the madness and savagery of ur love? I'm surrounded by u and now I'm suffocating. I should never have fallen 4 u, now I don't know how I'll ever escape on my own. My existance is contaminated by ur ignorance, I know I deserve to be treated better in this one-sided alliance, yet I continue to betray myself with my own contorted visions oy ur divinity. |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
wow..i definately understand this...love can be hard...really hard...i feel ya here...going through the same thing..::Hugs:: ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i really like this, you express yourself well with this piece. keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Honey Member
since 2001-10-09
Posts 92Hot girl From Canada |
Wow!!!! This was totally awesome! I think i've said this to jenn but i think you need to hear it to. Sometimes our best work comes out of a fit of rage. I loved it thanks for sharing and i really look forward to reading more of your work |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I really likes you style of writing one thing though, it would be better to use the word instead of the numbers  thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Love...Bah! All that it does is annoy us.  @Love.It is a shame that someone is making you feel this way. It'll make you a stronger person at the end of it though for enduring it. Good luck with everything and thanks for the read. ~AF~ "When I eat I feel. It is better if I don't feel, I am too afraid." - Ellen West |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow.. lots of love lost poems roaming around in Teen here lately. Love sucks, eh? This is a well written piece. I enjoyed what you had to say. One suggestion... the next poem you decide to post, try to stay away from using shorthand. It made it very hard to read... type out the words "for", "two/to/too", "your", etc. That will make it much easier to read. Very nice work, just the same. I look forward to reading more from you.  --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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