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Our First kiss
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Our First kiss |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl 
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This is for Marge...she ispired me and I thought I'd give it a go.  Thoughts and comments appreciated. As I sleep, All is still. Resting warmly, in golden light. Images flooding, throughout my mind, reminding of your touch. A soulmate, A friend. A caring heart, guiding my own. Dancing slowly, on that moonlit beach. Hypnotized by- your pleading eyes. Here with me- you always are. Every night, as I dream, of that first kiss. [This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 11-30-2001).] |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i really liked how you ended this piece. this flowed really well and had some really nice images. keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This piece was written very well. I like the short lines, I thought it worked very well with what you were saying. style of a poem is everything... very sentimental piece. (: Good job. --Marie If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jenn~ This is just lovely~ I've received your e-mail of the URL and thank you for participating~  Inspire looks good on you~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
BC= thank you I always appreciate your kind words  Marie= well girlie it's bee forever since I've seen you on the blue pages  Thanks for replying and thanks for your comments.Marge= Glad you liked it. hehe Ispire? I always thought I was more a pastel "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Hey hun, This was so pretty!!  You really captured the moment with some beautiful imagery and, as usual, I really liked it! Great work!  ~*Nikki*~ *~Fighting for your love~* |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Thanks Nikki "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Tis not my favorites of yours, However...Was a good piece all the same. Awesome imagery indeed. "I'd rather die purposely alone than to have lived an accidental life of solitude."- Jesa "§ùgã®" Thompson |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Awww this was nice...i liked it ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
lovely piece...i liked the whole poem but the ending is what captured it the most. i liked it, Jenn. Hey...#25437 |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
a great poem old friend. i liked it very much and hope to read more real soon I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
I really like this piece keep up the awsome work. Lauren "I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
jenn it rocked i loved it! robin repeat after me: punk is the best music ever created! |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
i agree with maire- the short lines gave the piece a really nice flow. read it through quick and had a smile on my face when i was finished....sometimes coveting something's better then the actual thing. liked this one lots Cut your hair. short. now. and cry. cuz no one cares. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Wow, this is absoloutely great Jenn, I love the short lines and the wonderful descriptions. keep up the good work Andrew If I gave you $1 for every reply you might be rich, but looking at your post count I think not. |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
I thought this was great...like the others have said...you created some beautiful imagery...thanks for sharing... ~Nikki~ Smile!! You never know who may be falling in love with it... |
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