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Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2001-07-05 07:06 PM

THE LOSS

Do you wonder where
your heading in life?
do you care?
My losses are listed
on the high lists
My mistakes are
paraded in front
of the world
I'm suprised by
the kindness you show me
You love me with
all your heart
Saving me so many times
keeping me on the
phone when I hurt
so much
Listening to me throw
up after my stupidty
LOving me for all that
I am
no pretense, no show
where would I would be
without you?
Life would have no shine
I couldn't hear your
southern drawl
You're a part of me
as I'm a part of you
our losses are great
they are horrible
If i could undo your
past i would
even if It would mean
that you would
never remember me
just so you could be
happy
so your sister would
still shower you with
smiles
so your Desi & Jason
could be with you
The greatest losses
are our biggest fears
fears of losing each
others love
I want to shower you
in love and smiles
to hold you when we
both get cold
This fear brings us
closer
we love, we fight,
we cry but
we never hate
Till death do us part.....

Regina

If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive.

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

1 posted 2001-07-05 09:48 PM

Wow, Regi. This is very different from your others. I REALLY enjoyed this. Definitely a library piece. These types of friends are the ones to hold most dear.. never let this person get away

Very nice work. I really liked the beginning. The way you opened the poem with a question got my mind reeling from the start. nicely done. I can't wait for another in the series.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

2 posted 2001-07-05 10:49 PM

I really like this poem. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of this series! Keep up the good work.

- Cody -

If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

3 posted 2001-07-06 12:43 PM

wow. im loving these regina. really speaking to my heart. great job hun. cant wait for the rest. in to the library this one also goes *hugs
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I know Im not perfect but I can smile
& I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes

JBaker515

Member

since 2001-02-28

Posts 458
Dartmouth College

4 posted 2001-07-06 01:01 AM

nice...i enjoyed it..
the other one for me was more gripping..

~Jeff~

"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

5 posted 2001-07-06 02:51 AM

indeed...different from your other pieces...quite the touching poem

...great job!

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-07-07 04:05 AM

This series seems to be a very emotion filled, raw one. I liked this one Regi, and once again hope you are ok.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

zarina
Member

since 2001-05-19

Posts 180

7 posted 2001-07-07 11:04 AM

This really touched me somehow.. I can relate to it. Very good..

Kicking Kim
Member

since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

8 posted 2001-07-07 12:05 PM

Wow, this was a very deep poem. Strong structured and had a nice rhythm without unnecessary rhyme. Keep writing!

^*~Kicking Kim~*^

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

9 posted 2001-07-07 12:21 PM

I loved this poem! Your series is going to be a real hit I am sure! Keep up the great work!!

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

10 posted 2001-07-10 07:53 PM

Ina, I'm glad this is more uplifting than the first part
You have so much raw emotions in your poems
Keep it up and I'll be here to keep reading
Thanks for sharing

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

11 posted 2001-07-20 10:19 PM

The ending was interesting. It was good, but still interesting. You've got my head running around with some thoughts now.
"The greatest losses
are our biggest fears"
Aint it the truth?! I hope that everything works out for you and this guy, Regi.

~AF~

Psychopathic chickens are plotting against me...

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