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-Myriad-
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0 posted 2001-11-27 11:43 PM


Her hands dance upon the ivory keys
Her eyes were closed, within a dream
And like a tune of autumn breeze
She sighed a sigh of perfection.

A watching eye did listen well
To every note that played aloud
A clicking nose that soon did swell
To something much more stunning.

The music played a stunning piece
Of winter chill, and summer sun
That caused the clicking to increase
To volumes much too loud.

The watching eye could not contain
Its wish to join the song that played
And with its beak, the piano feigned
As shrills of noise came forth...


To see the illustration, go to: http://elfwood.lysator.liu.se/loth/l/e/leahwong/bird.jpg.html

We hope you enjoy it as much as we had doing this. *smiles*


-Myriad- and ++ Leah ++

Infinitum.

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...



© Copyright 2001 -Myriad- - All Rights Reserved
zarina
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1 posted 2001-11-28 04:41 AM


I love this..

I'm always myslef. Isn't that enough for you?

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2 posted 2001-11-28 05:28 AM


I loved this. And i loved the picture. I displayed my liking towards it in a comment. Anyhow, well done here Myriad and Leah. Beautiful!  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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3 posted 2001-11-28 10:26 AM


OOoooohhh pretty, you two. I love that birdie  

  ~Carly

Speak softly and carry a beagle.

"Go outside and use your own eyes. You'll be surprised to see things you've never been taught."
   ~Edouard Manet

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viginia
4 posted 2001-11-28 01:27 PM


very nice work you two, you did a really beautiful job with this piece.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

vlraynes
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5 posted 2001-12-26 02:37 PM



Myriad & Leah-
This is excellent!
You two write VERY well together.
I really enjoyed this.
Hugs,
~Vicky


"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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6 posted 2001-12-26 04:46 PM


This is absolutely beatiful!  But... *sniff* *sniff* LEAH! I do miss Leah...

*ahem* The rhyme scheme through this piece is amazing, and the images portrayed are excellent... you two are very talented writers, and I believe it shows.

Wonderful work!

--Marie

If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway.

[This message has been edited by Fading Away (12-27-2001 10:37 PM).]

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7 posted 2001-12-26 08:22 PM


Beatifully written guys!! ::Applauds::

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

anonymousfemale
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8 posted 2001-12-27 08:45 PM


Wow, absolutely brilliant. The picture is great, the poem is great, the whole damn set up is great!

I do like the way you've brought a picture in with the piece. Good thinking you two.

Thanks for the read. I hope you guys considering doing more things like this in the future.

~AF~

If this is all the world has to offer, I want a refund on my life.

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9 posted 2001-12-28 02:58 AM


i liked this poem a lot! great work!
robin

repeat after me: punk is the best music ever created!

Ceinwyn
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10 posted 2001-12-29 01:40 PM


I adored every word!! this is sooo going in my library *actually glad she's taking the time to read some poems* really cheering me up..especially this one..

Kristen

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11 posted 2002-01-17 01:53 PM


such beautiful words, almost like singing
thanks for the awesome read

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


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12 posted 2002-02-06 01:39 AM


One Word: Beautifullytalented. ^_^

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